regarding some deleted poem...	12-May-02/8:21 PM
a) I don't get it. b) this doesn't seem much like a poem...
Re: Untitled by swift_enterprises	12-May-02/8:21 PM
eh?
regarding some deleted poem...	12-May-02/8:22 PM
silly. :)
Re: Fragment by goldfish	12-May-02/8:23 PM
a beautiful fragment, but really needs some sort of capping at the end somehow.
Re: passion by lexicon	12-May-02/8:24 PM
interesting. I'm impressed with how awkward you made almost every single grouping of words. But I can't say I find that pleasant.
Re: Vituperation by crims0ngh0st	12-May-02/8:25 PM
unpleasantly redundant.
regarding some deleted poem...	12-May-02/8:26 PM
very cute. :)
Re: Street Me by wlshepherd	12-May-02/8:27 PM
I don't get it.
Re: Civilization by ifni	12-May-02/8:27 PM
I've heard a theory that consciousness arises out of the ability to lie. :)
Re: Homecoming by ObiWonKn	12-May-02/8:30 PM
the first two stanzas seem to be leading up to something, but I can't tell what angle you're taking with the final. perhaps more could be explained, somehow?
Re: he is dead by roses are read	12-May-02/8:32 PM
a nice thought, but wasn't portrayed as well as it could have been. there's not enough structure/flow for me to feel.
Re: Carrie by ErgoErgun	13-May-02/1:37 AM
a very interesting tone and some nice self-reference.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/5:38 PM
hear hear! ;) :) responding to: ------------- HEY not everything here is self-indulgent juvenalia. Some of it is complaints about self-indulgent juvenalia. And for the record, some times I take time out to order potstickers.
Re: #9 by mikejedw	13-May-02/7:19 PM
perfect. :) why the numbering, though? [geh -- I need to make it so you can comment on comments!]
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/7:19 PM
very interesting. =) I like it a lot, though I couldn't say why.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/7:20 PM
this one didn't have much impact.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-May-02/7:24 PM
simple and elegant in that manner but could be better constructed. I found little to no flow/cadence/rhythm, and certain near-rhymes sounded either forced or painfully accidental. (hurry/worried, things/sing).
Re: life by Luke_is_Crazy	14-May-02/1:03 AM
cute. doesn't do much for me. I like what the first two lines could have been, maybe.
regarding some deleted poem...	14-May-02/1:10 AM
uh. huh. reminds me of the images in the back of Mad magazine. :)