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Carrie (Lyric) by ErgoErgun
Nobility on no accounts overtook me, but now I find myself scrawling despicable poetry! - the most undignified concession of frailty... at your authority hath commanded me... Carrie... This vow by your intellect, wide-eyes, and softened hair do I dare to move, show emotion... to simply care... Don Juanism was my philosophy; the expedient my style, but your grace perverted, inverted, defiled the vile. A quiver of your delicacy, a misbegotten stare now pollutes the breadth of a soul filled with air... thoughts convoluted in a head at your command are turning my lascivious desires from boyhood to man. And while we feast on ideas I pray you feel in kind, for this is transcendence: a sex of the mind.

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6875
Weighted score: 4.724751
Overall Rank: 11849
Posted: May 12, 2002 11:25 PM PDT; Last modified: May 12, 2002 11:27 PM PDT
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Comments:
[6] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 | 13-May-02/1:37 AM | Reply
a very interesting tone and some nice self-reference.
[n/a] gsosville @ 209.119.37.192 | 31-May-02/8:13 AM | Reply
pure shit
[9] shwenatjadeflower @ 68.12.149.5 | 18-Jul-02/3:30 PM | Reply
i like it
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.116.54 | 23-Jan-04/10:19 AM | Reply
You're always good.
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