Re: drum circle by <~>	28-Dec-02/2:56 PM
color me confounded and confused. :/
Re: me, Deep-as-a-puddle and the elusive connection by lunar	28-Dec-02/3:13 PM
I think connection could be an interesting thing to explore, but... I had no connection with this poem beyond that.
Re: Maria by Nicholas Monson	28-Dec-02/3:15 PM
I understand how hard it can be to work these things... overall I like the piece, but: "Then I first espied her. She had beauty to excess! A laugh to shiver spines - A Galician princess. What mystic Yorkshire root Was stirred in quiemada? What supernatural spice Was robbed from heaven's larder?" really don't work for me. they stumble and may have even broken something.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Dec-02/3:17 PM
I'm sorry. I really can't stand your repeated confusion with you're. Not to demean your loss myself, but I think the poem does.
Re: what I saw at work today by Bill Z Bub	28-Dec-02/3:22 PM
damn. cheeky but poignant. I like the title (what I saw at work today), though perhaps something fancier might identify it better.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Dec-02/3:25 PM
Excuding -> Exuding. the second to last stanza stumbles for me. it feels like too much "and now a pause for reflection" -- maybe skinning it some and breaking it apart would help. I like the piece overall, and the end cinches it well.
Re: Front, Porch, Swing. by horus8	28-Dec-02/4:56 PM
veddy veddy nice.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Dec-02/4:59 PM
ermp? very nice.
Re: I have reinvented the haiku and made it my own, becoming the world's first haiku gangsta in the process so you all had better just get it over with and give this 'ku a big fat TEN? by bondjedi	29-Dec-02/2:23 AM
that's pretty bad.
Re: The Fire Burns Bright (an Ode to Kaolin) by <~>	4-Jan-03/9:41 PM
Thank you very, very much for this. It means a lot. =)
Re: his hair is an acid trip by blurryphotograph	10-Jan-03/6:07 PM
umm. erm. hrm. interesting?
Re: Fuck by Bobjim	15-Jan-03/4:44 AM
thanks. title's now limited to 30 chars.
Re: The importance of lighting by blackball	19-Jan-03/3:53 AM
didn't really work for me. the beginning was blah enough that the hah at the end didn't do it.
Re: Forwords by INTRANSIT	19-Jan-03/3:57 AM
cute. :) did you really mean "forwords" as opposed to "forwards"? I suppose you may have, though simple minds like mine may need it more blatant of a pun (less blatant?)... "for words".
Re: Crystals In the snow by feathers68	19-Jan-03/3:58 AM
huh. I like.... the syllabic flow. it seems perfect. but I'd like a tad more rhyme, a hint other than the chopping of lines, the addition of commas where they wouldn't belong in prose, and use of imagery that this is poetry. the statement/thought is cute, though.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Jan-03/4:00 AM
well, *I* found it hilarious. :) especially with the sEX at the end. Gods, I love randomness. :) actually think it could be touched up some with a bit more... emphasis here and there. (maybe: with NOT chocolate attached) [more of a clue that that wasn't a typo of "no"?] dunno. it's cute. :)
Re: 2 from 6 by INTRANSIT	19-Jan-03/4:01 AM
'till is spelled more properly 'til (as it's short for until, not untill) I can't say I really get either of these, or them together, nor the title.
Re: blues by <~>	19-Jan-03/4:04 AM
I don't quite get this. what are they teeming with, what are they awash with? awash me unclue-full.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Jan-03/4:07 AM
didn't really do it for me; I felt too distant from the piece. pretty nonetheless.
Re: not even soup by <~>	19-Jan-03/4:09 AM
this I like. "well past dinner time" seems a bit prosaic for the rest in phrasing, but... I like. and I've never really been comfortable with haikus giving information in the title that is not distinctly said (as opposed to hinted at) in the poem.