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Free verse № 36936

The importance of lighting

Member since 2002 · Posted 19 Jan 2003 · 2 comments

i stand under shattered light our minds, faces, bodies, moving as one i engulf you in perfect splendour as everyone watches your hands, my hands move together there are no longer four roving hands, only two palms, ten digits fluttering over one entity it seems an eternity that we lust, unconscious in desire expanding and contracting with the dangerous beat encompassing us all for a brief second i take my eyes away couples everywhere, our lust seems intoxicating the lights are beautiful; their radiance adds fuel to the fire what once was innocent, now is vibrant, alive again our hands, as one, encompass your body i move for a kiss i am alive we are alive this should never end the ceiling explodes, devastating the mood we move, quickly yet discretely like a woman and her shadow finally as one

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[8] horus8 19-Jan-03/1:45 AM Reply
Sound like the last dance saved8.
[5] nentwined 19-Jan-03/3:53 AM Reply
didn't really work for me. the beginning was blah enough that the hah at the end didn't do it.