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Crystals In the snow (Free verse) by feathers68 There is a sparkling shimmering light,
that flickers in the snow,
Tiny little diamonds glisten in
the morning light.
Maybe they were put there
to shine upon our lives,
to remind us of the
beauty resting at our feet.
Like Crystals in the snow,
or maybe they are flecks of angels wings!
Up the ladder:
No future
Down the ladder:
affection wasted
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Posted: January 17, 2003 3:51 PM PST; Last modified: January 18, 2003 4:59 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 7852 Comments:
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ChunkyHunkyMonkey @ 64.12.96.237
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17-Jan-03/5:01 PM
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thats really good i like this i really do
diamond typo.
huh. I like.... the syllabic flow. it seems perfect. but I'd like a tad more rhyme, a hint other than the chopping of lines, the addition of commas where they wouldn't belong in prose, and use of imagery that this is poetry.
the statement/thought is cute, though. 116 view(s)
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