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No future (Free verse) by Freethinker1602
It's your touch that I dream of The want for it drives me mad I crave for your tounge on my neck I hunger for our lips to be one Oh why does fate taunt me so Your touch is with held From my skin in the presence Of a friend or an adult And though I know the Reason behind it all I still long to act in a Most foolish way just to have Your hand in mine You say the fox can be caught However time and again it will not I'd loved every second to know That you could hear my heart I lusted for things that I knew Might one day happen And now I wish I never knew What it was to hunger You said what I didn't know was there Now there is no chance that I desire Leave me alone wretched being You could have gone on a totally different path And yet the only thing I have to thank you for Is the truth

Up the ladder: ?
Down the ladder: Crystals In the snow

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7851
Posted: January 16, 2003 6:27 PM PST; Last modified: July 25, 2003 11:56 PM PDT
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Comments:
[0] poetandknowit @ 67.40.59.91 | 16-Jan-03/9:58 PM | Reply
Pimple poem, super sized!
[n/a] Freethinker1602 @ 68.48.88.129 > poetandknowit | 17-Jan-03/5:02 AM | Reply
pimple poem?....
I had written the last 8 lines in anger. The ass I wrote this about never realized that this is how it'd been for a while. I'd wanted no future with him.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > poetandknowit | 17-Jan-03/5:29 AM | Reply
What a dull comment. This is nowhere near as bad as most adolescent poetry. It doesn't rhyme "lies" with "eyes", "be" with "me" or "face" with "disgrace". You have become a lifeless parody of yourself.
[0] poetandknowit @ 65.101.210.167 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 17-Jan-03/1:13 PM | Reply
This coming from the king of mindless self parody. Obviously, you failed to read the poem. So, fuck you, turkey.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > poetandknowit | 17-Jan-03/1:47 PM | Reply
I only said that in lifeless parody of a comment I made a few days ago, when I pointed out that I have become a lifeless parody of myself. It seems your ironic observation was not as ironic as you thought. How ironic.

Obviously, I didn't fail to read the poeme. Obviously, you know I didn't fail to read the poeme. That is a silly sort of reply.
[10] ChunkyHunkyMonkey @ 64.12.96.237 | 28-Jan-03/5:54 PM | Reply
I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
[6] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 26-Feb-03/1:42 PM | Reply
This one is called "Senior tongue lender".

Or,

" Fuck you Turkey, read the poeme"

Or,

"A poem you can pop".
[6] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 26-Feb-03/1:44 PM | Reply
This is a bit more arc'd and much better then the other two, actually. that 's why i gave it a six.
[n/a] Freethinker1602 @ 68.48.88.129 > Bachus | 26-Feb-03/3:29 PM | Reply
HOw kind. SO if it were based on a hundred point system, such as the one they use in the schools, I'd still have failed...
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