Re: Sticks and Stones Farm, Pot Luck Thursday Nights by <~>	19-Jan-03/4:10 AM
a moment, but doesn't "poem" for me.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Jan-03/4:11 AM
looks like an evil librarian. :heh: ... filing?
Re: Tree (WARNING: do NOT hug!) by Yardbird	21-Jan-03/7:14 AM
cute.
Re: poemrancour by JakeBike	21-Jan-03/11:12 AM
crack! crack crack crack! :squaw: crack!
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-03/4:11 AM
hmm. I didn't really like how the last two stanzas rebelled against the form of the rest of the poem. pretty, overall.
Re: Smoking Clitoris with PHD handles by <{Baba^Yaga}>	26-Jan-03/4:13 AM
why two p's in appology?
Re: Abused by scitz	26-Jan-03/4:14 AM
Too simplistic for my tastes. "this then this then this then this", forced rhyme and cadence...
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-03/4:14 AM
Why did you write this?
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-03/4:15 AM
hilarious. :) eh, it must be early in the morning. I really want to give this a 7.5.
Re: Wild Child by crimzon	26-Jan-03/4:17 AM
The repetition thing is something I do much myself, but this feels... cluttered and bloated. try to chop some words and ponder more strongly the images you've got. as well, consider why you're actually writing the poem, what you want to convey.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-03/4:19 AM
cute, but not for me. you might submit this to nfg, really, though I suggest not as a poem. :)
Re: 3.85g by Crakyamuni	26-Jan-03/4:20 AM
hmm. could use some grammar/spelling work imo. curious what the g is -- before looking at the poem, I expected it to mean gravities. could also use some cliche work, and rhythm.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-03/4:21 AM
cliche. :/ maybe you could do something with this to rise it above the done and dead?
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-03/4:23 AM
why did this have to hurt? I definitely can appreciate your pain after reading this. :/ I expect DA would get a kick out of this.
Re: insomnia plunge by pomoxo	26-Jan-03/4:24 AM
interesting. I like the form a lot, but can't quite wrap myself around it nor submerge myself in it. yet... I like it.
Re: Dr. Skellington by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	26-Jan-03/4:29 AM
it makes me chuckle, at least. 81% 76.8% la. la la la.
Re: early morning write by crimzon	26-Jan-03/7:06 AM
this stumbles for me near 'belated', or perhaps 'today' -- one syllable too many? ever patient should by hyphenated, I think. "stealing its blanket of twilight" doesn't quite scan right, either. I like this a lot, though. 8.
Re: Sierra by crimzon	26-Jan-03/7:08 AM
some scan problems, but overall nice. "her nose ... beautiful", for instance, stumbles me. I'd also put a line break between "her" and "she", and possible "she" and "her" to hint to the reader of the switch. 7.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-03/7:18 AM
hmm. ?
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Jan-03/7:20 AM
eh. images are... trite. done. dead. vapid.