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Sierra (Other) by crimzon her eyes so big and bright, shining
her mouth so small and humble, quiet
her hands so fragile yet strong, soft
her nose so pleasant and precious, beautiful
her face paints a picture of the world we will know
she looks to me to say " i love you"
she smiles to say "don't worry..only hope"
she grasps my hand to say "she needs me"
she wrinkles her nose to say "life is new today"
her face paints a picture of the world we will know
Up the ladder:
Surreal
Down the ladder:
help me understand
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Posted: January 25, 2003 9:21 AM PST; Last modified: January 25, 2003 9:21 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.1788044 Overall Rank: 4862 Comments:
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nentwined @ 66.92.183.34
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26-Jan-03/7:08 AM
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some scan problems, but overall nice. "her nose ... beautiful", for instance, stumbles me. I'd also put a line break between "her" and "she", and possible "she" and "her" to hint to the reader of the switch. 7.
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