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Surreal (Free verse) by wordontheverge
In other lifetimes we share possibility I might see you there Luggage in hand To take me away To a distant memory Flying fish over crystal seas Caribbean Refusal to get stuck in average territory I remember you perfectly Like artifacts exhumed from my heart Tomorrow seems like forever away A journey towards a world simple Where good friends don?t die And love doesn?t disappear We get along because we know The next day exists As detached as we may feel Amidst saccharine proposals that persist Sun rains down like melted wax Many approaches unapproved Because I am scared to make a mistake To take back my self-indulgence Alone Achieve unknown status The real world we?re in doesn?t like the truth Or poetry that sounds bitter Like survival Maybe next time we?ll be able to rise above all of the seasons Reason our way out of addiction Love is a poem I keep in my head For another day.

Up the ladder: Contrasts
Down the ladder: Sierra

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.5
Weighted score: 5.1788044
Overall Rank: 4861
Posted: January 21, 2003 1:19 AM PST; Last modified: January 21, 2003 1:19 AM PST
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[9] Ranger @ 212.219.142.161 | 21-Jan-03/1:29 AM | Reply
Like the end! Nice work, perhaps you could do another version of this and bring out the surreality (just for lil old me!) because I'd love to see more images-check out my 'Am I Still Here' if you want.

Yes anyway, a good poem here's a nine.
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