Re: Pill-Popper's Confessional by Sasha	5-Mar-09/10:18 PM
ROFL Yes. I think it needs a little smoothing, but yes, this is perfect ranker material.
Re: Echoes of Eichmann by Caducus	5-Mar-09/10:21 PM
has something, I like the weaving of images, and I think appropriate gravitas for the content. Just doesn't scan the way I want, and perhaps ... rough/disjoint in more than flow?
Re: The flute sound makes me blue by Prince of Void	5-Mar-09/10:21 PM
hmm, no.
Re: The death of Carlos Huarrez by Caducus	5-Mar-09/10:23 PM
huh. good stuff here. not quite picturing it all, (and what are "blue screams"?). But yeah, some good stuff here.
Re: The PROJECT by Sigh'ense...	5-Mar-09/10:24 PM
no.
Re: Taste Ghazni by eliastemplar	5-Mar-09/10:26 PM
insence -> incense or rather, incense-like hmm. better than I expected, from that; but still kind of plain. paint me more.
Re: Unwind Again by dclark	5-Mar-09/10:26 PM
what? really? no.
Re: diamond embedded once before & always by A. Nomaly	5-Mar-09/10:27 PM
strange... good flow, but the context isn't quite there for me.
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Mar-09/10:29 PM
> I ignored you for a client > that always spelt my name wrong. ouch. overall: ouch. well done?
Re: the invisible beauty by Prince of Void	5-Mar-09/10:30 PM
meh.
Re: Back to reality by Prince of Void	5-Mar-09/10:31 PM
the edge of the ocean is just another's hell. or heaven we'd all get kicked out of. but it's nice to imagine?
Re: Snorting the Cosmic Dust. by DreamerSupreme	5-Mar-09/10:33 PM
my eyes blurred. you hit a constant tone that turned the words to mush (maybe I need more coffee).
Re: To Poets Whose Writing is Fecal. by SupremeDreamer	5-Mar-09/10:33 PM
Hear, hear!
Re: To those that would teach poetry by INTRANSIT	5-Mar-09/10:35 PM
relieving? interesting piece.
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Mar-09/10:37 PM
ssssssssssssssssssssssssstrange, man.
Re: mission statement by malpaso	5-Mar-09/10:39 PM
two l's in ellipses. the rest... eh. points for intent?
Re: Final Dates, part 1: through gates of smoke and salt by Bill Z Bub	5-Mar-09/10:51 PM
god damn dude. yeah, that's personal. and eloquent. and evocative--I can feel it. The odd thing is I feel like it hits too close to home to crit, but if I step back a bit, it's not my home. So: if I were reading this @ GUD, I'd be thinking, wondering... this is really beautiful. But is there enough of a story, enough of an arc, enough "other" on top of the punch to the gut and its beauty? And I don't know, there. I'd let it sit and hope to get some response from others. And I think the response would tend to depend on who read it next.
regarding some deleted poem...	5-Mar-09/10:54 PM
you're making my brain hurt too much. dig the imagery, as well, but I don't entirely trust a coherence to seek for... still, sure, a 7 on style, and hope.
Re: Behind Closed Doors by Spirit52	5-Mar-09/10:55 PM
needs something more, I think.
Re: The time doesn’t matter by Prince of Void	5-Mar-09/10:58 PM
I like the setting, but not the poem, and not where it ends. Still, I think you've got a seed here, if you can nurture it to grow (and I don't mean in length, so much).