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The time doesnât matter (Free verse) by Prince of Void The time doesnât matter
Where I'm standing on the shore of past
Facing the sea of future patiently
Those waves are waving at me restlessly
The only thing matters is the sun
It's coming on the stage of a powerful play
And my role is what I'm trying to do best
To bring back not the past or something
That I've forgotten
Something I'm looking for
Something it might end in the hopeless tears
But at the end there is the light
It makes hopes to find
To find what I came forward
To find what I stand alone for
Up the ladder:
Disillusioned & Confused
Down the ladder:
Rewrite
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Posted: December 21, 2008 11:58 AM PST; Last modified: December 21, 2008 12:05 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0 Overall Rank: 8133 Comments:
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nentwined @ 75.83.196.201
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5-Mar-09/10:58 PM
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I like the setting, but not the poem, and not where it ends. Still, I think you've got a seed here, if you can nurture it to grow (and I don't mean in length, so much).
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