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The time doesn’t matter (Free verse) by Prince of Void

The time doesn’t matter Where I'm standing on the shore of past Facing the sea of future patiently Those waves are waving at me restlessly The only thing matters is the sun It's coming on the stage of a powerful play And my role is what I'm trying to do best To bring back not the past or something That I've forgotten Something I'm looking for Something it might end in the hopeless tears But at the end there is the light It makes hopes to find To find what I came forward To find what I stand alone for

nentwined 5-Mar-09/10:58 PM
I like the setting, but not the poem, and not where it ends. Still, I think you've got a seed here, if you can nurture it to grow (and I don't mean in length, so much).




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