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The death of Carlos Huarrez (Free verse) by Caducus
In a street named after a nuke fifty limp stars hung with Carlos Huarrez forty five yards from a wire fence he used to pluck F14's from. Carlos became a marine looking west from the east whenever shots hit sand leaving death shells with blue screams. His taker was Kazem from Lahore an earthquake made him a soldier. Once he made boats, and children both he and Carlos held shells to there childrens ears. In a woman Carlos called 'Te Amo' is a boy she named after him clasping at the fence she makes pictures from wired diamond clouds waiting for wind to move the flag

Up the ladder: Twilight of the Mind
Down the ladder: tone-deaf or color-blind

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Arithmetic Mean: 9.0
Weighted score: 5.1897035
Overall Rank: 4746
Posted: January 21, 2009 1:34 AM PST; Last modified: January 21, 2009 1:34 AM PST
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[10] malpaso @ 70.233.138.77 | 25-Feb-09/9:35 AM | Reply
Ah,First World meets Third World....by chance? Excellent work!!
[8] nentwined @ 75.83.196.201 | 5-Mar-09/10:23 PM | Reply
huh. good stuff here. not quite picturing it all, (and what are "blue screams"?). But yeah, some good stuff here.
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