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The death of Carlos Huarrez

Member since 2002 · Posted 21 Jan 2009 · 2 comments

In a street named after a nuke fifty limp stars hung with Carlos Huarrez forty five yards from a wire fence he used to pluck F14's from. Carlos became a marine looking west from the east whenever shots hit sand leaving death shells with blue screams. His taker was Kazem from Lahore an earthquake made him a soldier. Once he made boats, and children both he and Carlos held shells to there childrens ears. In a woman Carlos called 'Te Amo' is a boy she named after him clasping at the fence she makes pictures from wired diamond clouds waiting for wind to move the flag

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[10] malpaso 25-Feb-09/9:35 AM Reply
Ah,First World meets Third World....by chance? Excellent work!!
[8] nentwined 5-Mar-09/10:23 PM Reply
huh. good stuff here. not quite picturing it all, (and what are "blue screams"?). But yeah, some good stuff here.