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Taste Ghazni (Free verse) by eliastemplar
Dry, dusty, and shimmering hot. Sometimes there is an insence like aroma of burning cedar and roasting meat, more often the streets reek of human and animal waste. Dust coats everything, dulls everything to different shades of brown and grey. The ghostlike berkas the women wear look like puddles left behind by the cloudless Afghan sky.

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.0
Weighted score: 5.1422777
Overall Rank: 5457
Posted: November 20, 2005 6:38 PM PST; Last modified: January 16, 2009 3:33 PM PST
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Comments:
[n/a] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 | 21-Nov-05/6:13 AM | Reply
Who would have guessed such colorful rugs and shawls could have come from such a dull looking place.
[8] zodiac @ 217.144.7.195 | 21-Nov-05/10:07 AM | Reply
incense, burqas. Otherwise, good. How's the kebab these days?
[7] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.44 | 3-Feb-06/8:26 PM | Reply
I don't know anything about Afghan style, this tells quite a bit.........or it is probably of just one area, like Calcutta being refered as India, though just a tiny part of India.
[9] SupremeDreamer @ 69.236.69.24 | 31-May-08/1:35 PM | Reply
incense.
[7] impert&ent @ 82.46.129.169 | 6-Jun-08/2:54 AM | Reply
in-sense?
[9] malpaso @ 70.233.167.164 | 16-Jan-09/5:20 PM | Reply
loved the part about the berkas and the puddles....enhances the whole theme of timelessness and that kind of subtle power
[7] nentwined @ 75.83.196.201 | 5-Mar-09/10:26 PM | Reply
insence -> incense

or rather, incense-like

hmm. better than I expected, from that; but still kind of plain. paint me more.
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