Re: Transfixed (#2) by Christof	27-Sep-02/3:33 AM
This is the poem in question - I found it on the internet. Remember, it's written by a character in the novel. Sharply the menacing wind sweeps over The bending poplars, newly bare, And the dark ribbons of the chimneys Veer downward; flicked by whips of air, Torn posters flutter; coldly sound The boom of trains and the rattle of hooves, And the clerks who hurry to the station Look, shuddering, over the eastern rooves, Thinking, each one, ???Here comes the winter! Please God I keep my job this year!??? And bleakly, as the cold strikes through Their entrails like an icy spear, They think of rent, rates, season tickets, Insurance, coal, the skivvy???s wages, Boots, school-bills, and the next instalment Upon the two twin beds from Drage???s. For if in careless summer days In groves of Ashtaroth we whored, Repentant now, when winds blow cold, We kneel before our rightful lord; The lord of all, the money-god, Who rules us blood and hand and brain, Who gives the roof that stops the wind, And, giving, takes away again; Who spies with jealous, watchful care, Our thoughts, our dreams, our secret ways, Who picks our words and cuts our clothes, And maps the pattern of our days; Who chills our anger, curbs our hope, And buys our lives and pays with toys, Who claims as tribute broken faith, Accepted insults, muted joys; Who binds with chains the poet???s wit, The navvy???s strength, the soldier???s pride, And lays the sleek, estranging shield Between the lover and his bride.
regarding some deleted poem...	27-Sep-02/3:40 AM
A nice bit of Dylan at the end there. You ought to be raging against the dying of the light though, not just letting it happen.
Re: AIDS Bonanza! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	29-Sep-02/4:33 AM
If I were, I'd be too ashamed to get out of bed in the morning.
Re: Gemini by susie	29-Sep-02/4:42 AM
This is good, the discussion of differing parts of one's own mind. Not sure about rhyming shaken and taking, though, but I like the idea of sacrificing the body to save the heart.
Re: The Poop Machines by dougsoderstrom	29-Sep-02/4:53 AM
Can't really argue with that.
Re: A Time for More War by dougsoderstrom	29-Sep-02/4:54 AM
This is irony, right? Let's hope so.
Re: Life As a Boat by dougsoderstrom	29-Sep-02/4:54 AM
I like this, but it doesn't really achieve anything on its own.
Re: MY LOVE FOR YOU by Normo	29-Sep-02/4:56 AM
Not bad - and the last stanza is stronger than the first two.
Re: Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof	1-Oct-02/6:04 AM
Very nice; perfection is impossible and not desirable. Is the 'score' a reference to the very idea of rating art i.e. exactly what we're engaged in here?
Re: one word by Blade	3-Oct-02/6:49 AM
Come on, there's not much point, is there?
Re: boom by UAFANTHORPEY	3-Oct-02/7:00 AM
Who did that 'boom shaka laka' song? I also detect the 'wicky wicky wah' influence of Will Smith. Not sure what Mrs. Fanthorpe would think, though.
Re: #17 by mikejedw	4-Oct-02/6:41 AM
I can see a flickering cloud bank out of my window, also in autumn sunshine. This poem speaks to me. Normally, I don't like the haiku form, but this is very visual and evocative.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-02/6:48 AM
Everyone must have dreams. But society frowns upon the dreamers.
Re: Breathless. by Service	4-Oct-02/7:00 AM
Smell the cliches a mile off. It's nice, but doesn't do it for me. Sexual innuendo gets a bit dull.
Re: Down Home by <~>	4-Oct-02/7:16 AM
I'm always a sucker for poems where the form is linked to the meaning. Dylan Thomas wrote a poem called 'Vision and Prayer' where the stanzas are in diamond and hourglass shapes.
Re: Farewell Song by jaalko	4-Oct-02/7:27 AM
I think this has been judged unfairly. If you're strict on your plagiarism thing, the Waste Land is all stolen, and that's the greatest poem ever.
Re: In Full Stop by vulcan	4-Oct-02/7:29 AM
Mysterious. Not bad.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-02/7:31 AM
Very nice. But I'm still unconvinced about the haiku. It always seems a bit pointless.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-02/7:34 AM
nobody cares about your post coital glow. I'm bored by sex poems. A seraph is a type of angel, and I think the implications of that are pretty unattractive in the light of the poem. Sorry, I just don't like it.
regarding some deleted poem...	4-Oct-02/7:36 AM
It's not your fault, but this sums up everything I don't like about haikus. It's very hard to write something worth reading that relies purely on the interplay of words out of any context.