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20 most recent comments by Nicholas Jones (201-220)

regarding some deleted poem... 4-Oct-02/7:37 AM
This is much better than your other poems. The list form can be very effective. I like the detail of French windows - very appropriate.
Re: love song by <~> 6-Oct-02/4:24 AM
I think this is nicely shaped prose rather than poetry, but that's an observation rather than a criticism. Very nice, but I don't like the word f-hole.
Re: My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus 6-Oct-02/4:34 AM
This is pants. Really, really pants. I'm very bored of people using sex to try and be shocking. Very tedious.
Re: Shadows by darren67 6-Oct-02/4:37 AM
Are you Darren Day?
Re: Bottom by ThoughtfulSoul 7-Oct-02/8:41 AM
It is lonely at the bottom. Being lonely means that nothing cna be a comfort. Sometimes having no punctutation is good, but here it isn't.
Re: The Phoebe Snow by horus8 7-Oct-02/8:46 AM
Pitiful. Sorrry.
Re: Remembering You by dalva 7-Oct-02/8:48 AM
Sorry, but it doesn't do it for me. And I'm in a mean mood today. Too diffuse - try making it shorter and more intense.
Re: Second Class? by lukehanney 9-Oct-02/4:57 AM
Are you Ray Davies? If not, nice bit of plagiarism!
Re: Second Class? by lukehanney 9-Oct-02/5:06 AM
There's a crack up in the ceiling,
And the kitchen sink is leaking.
Out of work and got no money,
A Sunday joint of bread and honey.

What are we living for?
Two-roomed apartment on the second floor.
No money coming in,
The rent collector's knocking, trying to get in.

We are strictly second class,
We don't understand,
(Dead end!)
Why we should be on dead end street.
(Dead end!)
People are living on dead end street.
(Dead end!)
Gonna die on dead end street.

Dead end street (yeah)
Dead end street (yeah)

On a cold and frosty morning,
Wipe my eyes and stop me yawning.
And my feet are nearly frozen,
Boil the tea and put some toast on.

What are we living for?
Two-roomed apartment on the second floor.
No chance to emigrate,
I'm deep in debt and now it's much too late.

We both want to work so hard,
We can't get the chance,
(Dead end!)
People live on dead end street.
(Dead end!)
People are dying on dead end street.
(Dead end!)
Gonna die on dead end street.

Dead end street (yeah)
Dead end street (yeah)

(Dead end!)
People live on dead end street.
(Dead end!)
People are dying on dead end street.
(Dead end!)
Gonna die on dead end street.

Dead end street (yeah)
Dead end street (yeah)
Dead end street (yeah)
Head to my feet (yeah)
Dead end street (yeah)
Dead end street (yeah)
Dead end street (yeah)
How's it feel? (yeah)
How's it feel? (yeah)
Dead end street (yeah)
Dead end street (yeah)
Re: Friendship by Blue Magpie 9-Oct-02/5:08 AM
Very nice. It makes a change from all the people showing off how many rude words they know.
Re: Creativity. by Blue Magpie 9-Oct-02/5:11 AM
Some lovely couplets. Yes, creativity can be a necessary part of life - but surely you have the tools of the poet?
Re: Reason for being late by Normo 9-Oct-02/5:15 AM
Amusing. Why not send some flour through the post so it looks like anthrax, and work gets evacuated? Note to CIA man reading this: That's a joke.
Re: rapping on caffeine by blackball 9-Oct-02/5:30 AM
Simplicity is often very effective, as it is here. But the poem itself speaks of complexity, if innate notions can change from black to white, all stability is destroyed.
Re: purple by youngweirdo 9-Oct-02/5:47 AM
There is poetry here. Of course there is. But it's not very good.
Re: Ode to Nicholas Jones by lukehanney 9-Oct-02/5:50 AM
Actually, this is bloody good.
Re: Ode to Nicholas Jones by lukehanney 9-Oct-02/5:52 AM
See what can be achieved through not stealing song lyrics!
Re: Plastic Man by lukehanney 9-Oct-02/5:53 AM
Bollocks. He nicked it off of the Kinks.
Re: Plastic Man by lukehanney 9-Oct-02/5:54 AM
I've got to go now. I'll have words with you later.
Re: ITS A SHAMBLES by lukehanney 9-Oct-02/8:52 AM
I favour the meat and potato pie myself. Nice poem, in an ironic kind of way.
Re: Sod by jrtails 11-Oct-02/5:44 AM
I agree. Way to counter bourgeois expectations!


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