| Re: Tingling by INTRANSIT |
7-Jan-03/10:43 PM |
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better than the last time. kudos, kiddo.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
7-Jan-03/10:58 PM |
have you been to the desert on a horse with no name?
did it feel good to get out of the rain?
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| Re: Cat.......The sequel by Topaz Servias |
7-Jan-03/11:00 PM |
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| Re: electronically by Quarton |
7-Jan-03/11:06 PM |
q, this seems naive. what is the point of all of this observation?
bitten by the byte? come now. you think beyond this. you have shewn it to be so.
you fall into formula here. if that was your aim: SUCCESS!
if not, scrap most of it and have another go at it.
respectfully speaking.
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| Re: Cat by Topaz Servias |
7-Jan-03/11:07 PM |
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settle's cat is dead. but not from falling off a LADDER.
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| Re: Song of Exodus by marvelis |
7-Jan-03/11:09 PM |
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| Re: Apocalypse by marvelis |
7-Jan-03/11:10 PM |
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i was in the kitchen, doing whippets. no, not whippits; i meant whippets. woof.
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| Re: Untimely Demise by marvelis |
7-Jan-03/11:11 PM |
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| Re: Backwards baby blend by Blade |
7-Jan-03/11:12 PM |
spell. forget casting them learn to.
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| Re: Nightwalker by Another Bobjim?!?! |
7-Jan-03/11:14 PM |
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"from the brutality of her wounds, detectives knew she ahd fought for her life. and it had been a viscious struggle....once again the crime scene evidence was hand-delivered to the crime lab in washington....this match seemed to scream that the cases were linked."
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| Re: Home by Owner of the Sky |
7-Jan-03/11:25 PM |
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ugh/probably, they'd get hit on the head with a silent tree.
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| Re: Shitetalker (An farewell ode to Settle. Read Nightwalker first) by Another Bobjim?!?! |
7-Jan-03/11:25 PM |
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| Re: Into the Deep by Owner of the Sky |
7-Jan-03/11:27 PM |
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okay, you got me. but not as a poem. sorry. it's not working like that. yet.
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| Re: 6.387 seconds by INTRANSIT |
8-Jan-03/8:52 AM |
the adrenaline rush on the edge of control.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
8-Jan-03/10:02 AM |
g--this you?
nice job, regardless.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
8-Jan-03/10:06 AM |
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no. you are doing it wrong.
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| Re: Pro Forma by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
9-Jan-03/7:57 PM |
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p.s.--that's MY palanquin. and i'd appreciate it if you gave back my elephant. and my cabana boy. dammit, h, i never said you could 'borrow' miguel!
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
13-Jan-03/12:13 AM |
caducus, this is way over the top.
you are trying too hard. one exapmle--the last line:
"Her crimson scythe of violence."
the word 'scythe' gives the reader violence implied. her crimson scythe of a smile/aagainst my lips/etc.
take out so many of the replications and make the poem like the sea where a skipping stone touches it, so the reader assembles it's flight in his mind from the splahes on the surface. touch lightly, and let your audience feel the depth beneath your meaning.
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| Re: Jewel by cleverdevice |
13-Jan-03/8:20 AM |
you know, this is a keen observation. you definitely waste your skill when you spew that other crap. why not work on refining your vision?
you know the egyptians wore them like jewels, right?
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| Re: Shark by cleverdevice |
13-Jan-03/8:37 AM |
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