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Untimely Demise (Lyric) by marvelis
At the top I stood As successful as a man ever could. The world I was leading The Champaign corks were popping. I had all the money And my suit was Armani. I felt as if I was in my life's morning, And then without a single warning; Now I don't remember, Much about what happened after. But I remember the sound That I heard all around. It sounded like a shot. But I thought, "It could not" I felt as if I was falling I caught a glimpse of something spilling. "Help, Help. He's shot! We need a doctor." "You'll make it. You're Tom McHactor." Someone said. But I knew my grave was made. And that is all I remember. From that night in December. But I do remember Events that occurred soon after. But those memories Are whole other stories. So I leave you this; The serpent will always hiss. For the weakest will always fall, And in the end so will the strongest.

Up the ladder: Only you
Down the ladder: To Find the Words

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.25
Weighted score: 4.7913947
Overall Rank: 11217
Posted: January 7, 2003 5:49 PM PST; Last modified: January 7, 2003 5:49 PM PST
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[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.240.125 | 7-Jan-03/6:58 PM | Reply
So it is the people of average strength who will remain standing? I suggest you read my poeme "Unwanted gift".
[3] <~> @ 67.84.171.238 | 7-Jan-03/11:11 PM | Reply
W.W.McG.D.?
[9] Another Bobjim?!?! @ 212.219.142.161 | 8-Jan-03/2:56 AM | Reply
Nice one. The final message seems sadly true. 9
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