regarding some deleted poem...	21-Aug-03/7:47 PM
tsk tsk. here you are, thinking you're clever, and trampling all over your own first amendment right to speak (and spell) english, and serve your metaphors up a la carte and kosher. Oh. see that? now you've gotten gravy on the peach cobbler. what a waste! garcon! une, encore!
Re: A Manifesto on Murder by Jeremi B. Handrinos	21-Aug-03/7:51 PM
surface snatching the cervix, as fee for service.
Re: A Mod Proposal (of Modest Proportions) by coolassbob	21-Aug-03/7:24 AM
funny. but i dinna see a proposal herein.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Aug-03/9:14 AM
3: rliging is great. 7: null 9: dadaesque. i enjoyed this feast of things.
Re: One Sided Love by Caducus	22-Aug-03/2:41 PM
nicely done, sir
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Aug-03/9:11 AM
was it rife with corn?
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Aug-03/9:10 AM
i call it enfeebled.
Re: The Angel at the arcade (this is actually an 'acne') by scitz	22-Aug-03/11:01 AM
nice. love the countdown.
Re: D.I.Y.M Syndrome by Rilke4ClosetLesbians	22-Aug-03/11:03 AM
:)
Re: D.I.Y.M Syndrome by Rilke4ClosetLesbians	22-Aug-03/11:03 AM
or should i say :o
Re: Aphrodite (edited) by Caducus	22-Aug-03/11:54 AM
cad--nice first try. but. why. do. you. insist. on. writing. with. a. different. voice. than. the. one. you. speak. with., just. because. it's. a. sonnet??? see how fucking annoying that is? don't try to be so noble. tell me about her breats, and how they mounded up, wet and lustrous, like pearls. tell me about the tangle of arame that dresses her..erm, 'cavern'... tell me about the sand in your crotch. that's what i want to hear.
Re: fragile by Bill Z Bub	21-Aug-03/7:55 PM
singular or plural: decide. "to be opened"--superfluous. can it. and "now"--nix that 2. do a little more with the last line--maybe 'tumbke into your sheets'. it's there, waiting for you--go on, man! write the bastard down!
Re: When He's In Me by J.B. Manning	21-Aug-03/7:03 PM
nice build-up. i especially like "sweat so sweet that sour seems discreet". typo: steel, not steal, right? also: "Pain Sparks In my mind Lightly slightly Stimulates And separates Us from them" who is us and who is them? gay/straight? something else? maybe it doesn't need to be explained, because this is about the heat, and i'm not wearing my inflammable cat suit tonight. oh well.
Re: A Surgeons Butchery by SupremeDreamer	21-Aug-03/7:52 PM
this would benefit from the use of one or more poetic devices.
Re: stop poking me georges seurat by coolassbob	21-Aug-03/7:25 AM
i'll bet georges liked his peas. i wonder what he drank?
Re: not titled by coolassbob	21-Aug-03/7:27 AM
shall i call you ismael? i think you mean subscribe: I do not _subscribe_ to a strict code of ethics.
regarding some deleted poem...	21-Aug-03/10:37 AM
JB--wow, you really know how to beat a syllable into the ground. the bellicose repetition is very hard to get past. next time you sit at the keyboard, tuck that blunt instrument you call a rhyming dictionary back into the bookcase. it's gotta be tattered by now.
Re: trying to cross the border to Sweetgrass by Patsy	21-Aug-03/10:33 AM
i do not understand your line breaks.
Re: Wha you funkin wan? by ==Doylum	20-Aug-03/9:08 AM
bah. away so long, and this is your triumphant return? BAH!
Re: fragile by Bill Z Bub	22-Aug-03/10:54 PM
:) have a 9.