| Re: Pressing Matters in the White House by cleverdevice |
26-Aug-03/6:51 PM |
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bouncygoodness. i 8 it up.
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| Re: The Better of the Sea by abecedarian |
26-Aug-03/6:56 PM |
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this just keeps getting better. nice job.
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26-Aug-03/7:20 PM |
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26-Aug-03/7:20 PM |
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| Re: It's about truckin' by INTRANSIT |
26-Aug-03/7:23 PM |
good stuff here, but the arbitrary uneveness is really disruptive.
change the pace when you want us to slam on the brakes. and then only. no vote/
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
26-Aug-03/7:26 PM |
oh lord, i'm stuck here in lodi again.
now go get me a fifth of polish and cut the crap.
you know this is not eve a valid attempt at satire. open your ears to language! open your eyes to attitude.
and go make me a sammich.
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| Re: Robe Lowe, Me and Icecream by RO-B-LOWE ME PLEASE |
26-Aug-03/7:27 PM |
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he's short. i bet he has SMS.
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| Re: By Now by Lie2MePinnochio |
27-Aug-03/8:32 AM |
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sweet. in a bitter sort of way.
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| Re: Nightshades by Bachus |
27-Aug-03/1:43 PM |
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you were not circadian to begin with????
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28-Aug-03/10:58 AM |
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"zero, my hero, how wonderful you are!!" --schoolhouse rock
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| Re: Mercury by david |
28-Aug-03/11:33 AM |
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the repetition of Mercury in the title and the first line unnerves me.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
28-Aug-03/5:45 PM |
you don't need "two" in the second line.
this is nice. cohesive. well-thought-out.
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| Re: Invisible Poo by kthay |
28-Aug-03/5:46 PM |
here's a visual extravaganza for you, sirrah:
www.ratemypoo.com
enjoy!
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| Re: Easter Egg Soup by kthay |
28-Aug-03/5:48 PM |
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you are a very silly poet. i like this innocent rhymimg of yours.
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29-Aug-03/10:59 AM |
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very weak ending. the opening is so strong. you must follow through. or else.
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| Re: Ashes to Ashes by Irischer Junge |
1-Sep-03/7:43 PM |
what if i'm jewish?
am i invalid?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
1-Sep-03/8:12 PM |
barrister, not lawyer,
a gentleman would not end a sentence with a preposition (for)
an horrible, an other
bloody is misused--gory would be more connotively correct
the Land; no need to name England; a gentleman would know the kingdom to which one referred.
who-knows-who is the vernacular of the guttersnipe
the last stanza is quite laughable.
if you are going to endeavor to demean a body from within their own milleau, you should at least attain some familiarity with usage before proferring such an attempt.
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| Re: Part I: The Peach by http://mulberryfairy |
1-Sep-03/8:15 PM |
i do not believe tat it was the nourishment you would not let drip away, but rather, the sweetness.
yes?
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1-Sep-03/8:17 PM |
hanging/hung?
why were you satisfied, and yet, the squirrel could get more from it?
this makes a metaphor and then sends it packing, to the unemployment office.
why?
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| Re: Peach (Revision) by http://mulberryfairy |
1-Sep-03/8:17 PM |
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even though it was a nectarine?
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