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Villanelle № 36809

Nightshades

by Bachus

Member since 2002 · Posted 17 Jan 2003 · Edited 27 Aug 2003 · 19 comments

I felt your Nightshades a callin'. And perfectly still I remained. Reading of dark poems by Mr. Auden Dust devil'd & depression sunken. The worker's soul's now maimed. I felt your Nightshades a callin'. The Jimson Weed turned me circadian. My breathing went unconstrained. Being of dark poems by Mr. Auden. Through his observations I've fallen' In a white room restrained. I heard your Nightshades a callin'. Tumbleweeds rolled past as an omen. Aquavitae gone, the drunk complained. Needing of more poems by Mr. Auden. A Mandrake's weighed root for bottlin'. The family portraits get reframed I knew the Nightshades were callin'. When I found of the poet, Mr. Auden.

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19 comments

[10] INTRANSIT 18-Jan-03/7:31 AM Reply
The best I've read this a.m.
[10] Quarton 19-Jan-03/7:30 AM Reply
Bravo, sir!! A difficult form to master but you have done so in this gem. Personally, I don't even attempt to write vilanelles. Much too stuctured and very hard to write without sounding forced. A ten.
[10] Quarton 19-Jan-03/7:36 AM Reply
Forgot to ask...Just what brand of aquavitae are you referring to? I might try some if it isn't over 100 proof. Hell, I'll try some regardless. The stronger the better.
[9] <~> 27-Aug-03/1:43 PM Reply
you were not circadian to begin with????
[10] horus8 › <~> 28-Aug-03/11:07 AM Reply
No, I was an unclasped necklace.
[7] deleted user 27-Aug-03/1:56 PM Reply
over my head.
[9] TanHand 27-Aug-03/2:20 PM Reply
BEST POEM EVER.......sdfsdfsdffdssdffsdsdfdsffdsfdssfd

NINE NINE NINE NINEasfdgfadfjyuariuye
[9] <~> › TanHand 27-Aug-03/5:50 PM Reply
you should just lick his balls and get it over with.
[9] TanHand › <~> 27-Aug-03/9:47 PM Reply
That's no place for a young artist's face to be.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> › TanHand 27-Aug-03/11:10 PM Reply
What, you haven't seen my self portrait?
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> › <~> 28-Aug-03/12:03 AM Reply
I had him over for din din and he only licked his plate. And he had with him a hot jew chick that thought I was selfish? Well, duh.
[10] INTRANSIT 27-Aug-03/3:34 PM Reply
Maaaaan, you and them villanelles really know how to get it on!
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › INTRANSIT 27-Aug-03/4:22 PM Reply
in with anger, out with love
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 28-Aug-03/12:05 AM Reply
In with shaved face, out with herpes. Life can be a fourweek seeping coldsore sometimes.
[10] DreamerSupreme 28-Aug-03/3:53 AM Reply
I liked this.. one of these days i need to attack poetic forms.. btw horus, i was wondering if you knew a good website that listed the forms and had examples of how to make them. If you know a good place tell me.

blessed with 10.
[9] <~> › DreamerSupreme 28-Aug-03/7:28 AM Reply
i'm not h8, but i have some references:

http://thewordshop.tripod.com/forms.html
this is the best one


http://library.thinkquest.org/3721/poems/forms/learn.html

http://dmoz.org/Arts/Literature/Poetry/Forms/Fixed_Verse_Forms/

http://www.ahapoetry.com/newform.htm

also, the Help page (link, upper left, every single page) can be most...help-full.
[0] deleted user 17-Sep-04/6:32 PM Reply
Y in the hell would u vote on your own poems????
[10] horus8 › deleted user 17-Sep-04/10:50 PM Reply
The same reason you do.
[0] Dr Fartspittle 11-Mar-07/6:21 PM Reply
Learn to spell your own fuckin' name, dickhead.