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Nightshades (Villanelle) by Bachus I felt your Nightshades a callin'.
And perfectly still I remained.
Reading of dark poems by Mr. Auden
Dust devil'd & depression sunken.
The worker's soul's now maimed.
I felt your Nightshades a callin'.
The Jimson Weed turned me circadian.
My breathing went unconstrained.
Being of dark poems by Mr. Auden.
Through his observations I've fallen'
In a white room restrained.
I heard your Nightshades a callin'.
Tumbleweeds rolled past as an omen.
Aquavitae gone, the drunk complained.
Needing of more poems by Mr. Auden.
A Mandrake's weighed root for bottlin'.
The family portraits get reframed
I knew the Nightshades were callin'.
When I found of the poet, Mr. Auden.
Up the ladder:
Brackish
Down the ladder:
Run Forest! Run...
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 7.0434785
Posted: January 17, 2003 5:17 PM PST; Last modified: August 27, 2003 1:27 PM PDTWeighted score: 7.006724 Overall Rank: 76 Comments:
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18-Jan-03/7:31 AM
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The best I've read this a.m.
Bravo, sir!! A difficult form to master but you have done so in this gem. Personally, I don't even attempt to write vilanelles. Much too stuctured and very hard to write without sounding forced. A ten.
Forgot to ask...Just what brand of aquavitae are you referring to? I might try some if it isn't over 100 proof. Hell, I'll try some regardless. The stronger the better.
you were not circadian to begin with????
No, I was an unclasped necklace.
over my head.
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you should just lick his balls and get it over with.
That's no place for a young artist's face to be.
What, you haven't seen my self portrait?
I had him over for din din and he only licked his plate. And he had with him a hot jew chick that thought I was selfish? Well, duh.
Maaaaan, you and them villanelles really know how to get it on!
in with anger, out with love
In with shaved face, out with herpes. Life can be a fourweek seeping coldsore sometimes.
I liked this.. one of these days i need to attack poetic forms.. btw horus, i was wondering if you knew a good website that listed the forms and had examples of how to make them. If you know a good place tell me.
blessed with 10.
i'm not h8, but i have some references:
http://thewordshop.tripod.com/forms.html this is the best one http://library.thinkquest.org/3721/poems http://dmoz.org/Arts/Literature/Poetry/F http://www.ahapoetry.com/newform.htm also, the Help page (link, upper left, every single page) can be most...help-full.
Y in the hell would u vote on your own poems????
The same reason you do.
Learn to spell your own fuckin' name, dickhead.
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