on Come tonight I'm waiting by kawakurdi
31 Aug 2002, 3:50 AM
Thank you Zin, I appeciate your genuine words. I have experienced a lot of death and destruction in my life as part of the destiny of my people. I had nothing to succour me but the idea of love and attempting to express it in poetry. We need owr own game/illusion to balance the essential absurdity of our mortal existence.
on The Sea by Tarquin De La Bog
14 Aug 2002, 1:53 PM
Childish but not a children's poem.
on Song of departure by kawakurdi
14 Aug 2002, 1:49 PM
No, it dramatises the act/theme of departure. There are three moments/times in the poem: before an imminent departure, when it actually takes place and after it has taken place. The images/metaphors embody these
moments and emotions they evoke.
moments and emotions they evoke.
on BEGINNINGS by kawakurdi
11 Aug 2002, 8:01 AM
I don't mean slaves in the historical sense but those who choose to be slaves for sheer minimum material gain and zero in the philosophical sense as making big containing always the element of eliminating/zeroing the result. Think of worldcom's added zeroes, for example.
on I'd like to by Parlster
7 Aug 2002, 3:52 PM
There is proper rhythm and rhyme and the repetition helps to convey the point. But the point is made pointless by the very contradiction that the monologuer is defeatist from within [I am feeling too old to slow] which makes him easily surrender to the others' perceived negative attitude [I'd rather not go]. So what is the point?
on Invisible too by horus8
31 Jul 2002, 2:36 PM
I am glad you are still on the hoof.
on Invisible too by horus8
31 Jul 2002, 2:21 PM
Or talking to me?!
on Invisible too by horus8
31 Jul 2002, 2:12 PM
This is perfect and beautiful, horus. I know you are rebellious and sombre most of the time [which is not uninteresting], but let us see your sober side too. I give you nine.
on Why Work? by TheTiredTyrant
31 Jul 2002, 2:02 PM
After a life of tyranny/Tired, exhausted like a granny/ You do not want to do any job/ In Wall street, a restaurant, or a shop?
Then why blame poor computer/
Which serves every one better and better?
Then why blame poor computer/
Which serves every one better and better?
on Daily Rutein by New Life Drug
31 Jul 2002, 1:45 PM
The poetic atmosphere is more involving, the emotions are deeper. Good poem.
on Prophecy by New Life Drug
31 Jul 2002, 1:39 PM
If you are thirteen, did you right
your first poem in your mother's womb? Perhaps you should have stayed there, there is no such thing as life. Stay.
your first poem in your mother's womb? Perhaps you should have stayed there, there is no such thing as life. Stay.
on Coloring Loss by molly
31 Jul 2002, 5:35 AM
I like the vivid images. But I don't like following the traditional sterotype of associating all negatives and nils with black.
on HOW DO I WRITE by kawakurdi
31 Jul 2002, 5:23 AM
Thanx for this expalanation. British English 's' is 'z' in American Englsih in many words: verbs and nouns. You gave examples. Another is
organis[z]ation.
Thanks for being so positive about the poem.
organis[z]ation.
Thanks for being so positive about the poem.
on Painty by wlshepherd
29 Jul 2002, 12:20 PM
The combination or rather the unity of image and thought [paint] is well maintained from the beginning to end with an excellent end. Clear, readable, interesting and innovative.
on Cour by Cha no Onna
29 Jul 2002, 10:58 AM
Good advice, I agree.
on Reverse Pschology by Mister Cakes
27 Jul 2002, 5:45 PM
If you can't spell psychology how can you reverse it?