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Coloring Loss (Free verse) by molly
When the sun is in my eyes When I taste my hair in my mouth, When my tears blur the landscape When I wear raindrops as others wear jewels I start to think of you, and a million other memories arise resurrected from their graves to haunt me. Like ashes in a fireplace an unexpected wind carried you off, I can still see you flying spiraling through the soot of the chimney-- the blackest color: black as oblivion black as naught black as love's suicide-- into the cold, pulsating night air. You leave me standing at the edge of the world, holding nothing but black in my hands.

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.5555553
Weighted score: 5.7777777
Overall Rank: 1719
Posted: July 30, 2002 5:58 PM PDT; Last modified: July 30, 2002 5:58 PM PDT
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[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 30-Jul-02/7:14 PM | Reply
As the young man ran through the cornfield he felt a million ears race throgh his fingers..and then their was silence...his smile was ear to ear.. your work is exquisitely descripive yet romantically short.compact.desirable.generous.opal. you pass. you r molly.your beak sings well
[10] Sigh'ense... @ 63.210.112.184 | 30-Jul-02/7:22 PM | Reply
there should be visual artwork of some medium created in concordance w/ this intire poem, because it is literary art in its own essence...Da1 thinks he's in love.--smile-- --i said smile damnit!--
[7] kawakurdi @ 195.93.50.184 | 31-Jul-02/5:35 AM | Reply
I like the vivid images. But I don't like following the traditional sterotype of associating all negatives and nils with black.
[10] Win @ 66.32.0.54 | 8-Aug-02/10:21 AM | Reply
Beautiful. I love the last 2 lines.
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