| Re: The Haiku by beakism |
23-Jul-02/3:22 PM |
Some only write Haikus
To draw attention, too much
Undeserved.
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| Re: The First Proper Evening of Summer by [mojo] |
23-Jul-02/1:54 PM |
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and resonant sounds- sounds dissonant. The rest is fine.
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| Re: Alone by shwenatjadeflower |
23-Jul-02/12:59 PM |
The thought is so sincere and the description is so sensual expressed in sweet simple words with perfect control of rhythm and rhyme.. I almost feel your feeling.
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| Re: If by elixir |
23-Jul-02/11:18 AM |
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If you enjoy rhymes, you should again try...
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| Re: Small and Simple by venusdemilo |
22-Jul-02/4:56 PM |
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If we could understand misunderstanding there would be no act of misunderstanding in the first place. A pointless argument.
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| Re: Navel Action by BadPoet |
22-Jul-02/2:32 PM |
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The challenge for poetry is to create art from apparently non-poetic themes. This poem meets this challenge fantastically.
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| Re: Enigma by BadPoet |
22-Jul-02/2:12 PM |
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meticulous artistry and surprising spin.
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| Re: Suffocating by mytenderrage |
22-Jul-02/1:46 PM |
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I read all your poems. Genuine feelings expressed clearly and simply. Why all this pessimism, desperation and pain and you are only 18? Look at the brighter side of life and its beautiful possibilities.
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| Re: i dreamt i spoke by roses are read |
22-Jul-02/9:22 AM |
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This poem has more potential which you could explore. Words are usually heard? So why are no ears cut off?!
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| Re: Whisper Under the Thunder by OneFingerAnswer |
21-Jul-02/11:40 AM |
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Good start. Then becomes repetitive, verbose and stale. I think syanzas 1,5,9 and 11 are enough.
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| Re: One Morning by Joyleaf |
21-Jul-02/10:41 AM |
Beautiful description capturing the delicacy of emotion and the
wonder of the moment. Well-done.
(grey not gray}
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| Re: Billie's Threnody by Frass |
20-Jul-02/8:13 AM |
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| Re: He loves me by susie |
19-Jul-02/11:13 AM |
Nice calculation.
Leaf not leave [but leaves]
Better to let the sun tells you the good news:
The sun starts shining and whispers to me: He loves you!
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| Re: affirmative action by thelonefrobros |
16-Jul-02/3:38 PM |
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this is badly impressive!
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| Re: This Strange Feeling by snowing |
16-Jul-02/2:35 PM |
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funny, fairy and bunny do not fit with the conclusion of the poem.
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