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Free verse № 5594

Alone

Member since 2002 · Posted 22 Jul 2002 · Edited 1 Jan 2003 · 8 comments

hey guys this is me: The thoughts inside my head Are driving me insane. I want you in my bed Pleasure and some pain. I think about you Day and night. I want to feel you By my side. I would smile You would woo You'd be gentile Just us two. But I am alone. And oh so blue. I answer the phone. It's not you. I start to cry I wish you were here I look up and sigh You see the same sky, my dear. This is small comfort I shall not rejoice For I have never Heard your voice. Or seen your face. Or touched your skin. Never embraced. Or run my finger Along your chin. If all these rhymes Mean naught to you Let all the crimes Befall on you. Cause here before you Is my heart Do not bestrew Or tear it apart. On this landing I have cried. Because you're not standing By my side.

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8 comments

[7] kawakurdi 23-Jul-02/12:59 PM Reply
The thought is so sincere and the description is so sensual expressed in sweet simple words with perfect control of rhythm and rhyme.. I almost feel your feeling.
[n/a] shwenatjadeflower 31-Jul-02/5:20 PM Reply
thank you
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 31-Jul-02/5:35 PM Reply
As I was mindlessly scanning through yet another Ode to Banality, I thought you had written: I would smile / You would poo / You'd be genital / Just us two. Thank Jesu I was mistaken, eh?. It would have spoilt an otherwise wond'rous poeme!
[8] titan69 4-Aug-02/1:02 AM Reply
hope your life gets beter
and you find what you want
[8] Sigh'ense... 9-Aug-02/3:57 AM Reply
too hot 4 TV
[8] Angelofpain25 21-Aug-02/3:44 PM Reply
Loved reading this poem. Enticing...it's all I have to say about that.
[8] Bachus 2-Jan-03/5:01 PM Reply
bestrew and gentile in the same poem, remarkable. have and eight. shall we date?i
[n/a] shwenatjadeflower › Bachus 11-Jan-03/8:13 PM Reply
:) to say it I hate, but we shall not date.