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This Strange Feeling (Lyric) by snowing What is it inside me that feels so funny?
Feels really furry, like a soft bunny.
A feeling that I never felt before
But now I want it more and more.
A little tingle runs through me
Wanting to get out to be free.
All this extra energy that I want to let go,
A firework of sparks flying high and low.
Simething icy cold melted my heart,
Is this thing a form of art?
Or a heavenly thing sent from above?
Could this strange feeling really be love?
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Arithmetic Mean: 4.9
Posted: July 15, 2002 9:06 PM PDT; Last modified: July 15, 2002 9:06 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.95 Overall Rank: 8979 Comments:
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kawakurdi @ 213.122.46.7
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16-Jul-02/2:35 PM
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funny, fairy and bunny do not fit with the conclusion of the poem.
Shhh.. be very, very qwuiet...I'm huntin Wabbits.. huuuuu.. huu.
you only get a 4.That 4 is because I like bunnies.the poem otherwise is sappy and dull.
Work on the depth of your language'
Your rhyme scheme is basic, like mine, But I like it 127 view(s)
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