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Suffocating (Free verse) by mytenderrage
Everything Is just crashing down. Pushing. Harder. Pressuring. I feel the weight. I feel the pain. I can???t breathe. I can???t hold on. I can???t. It???s just pushing me harder. Crashing against me. My pain and torment. My aching form Forlorn and lost Lying under The large solid. It???s crushing me It???s pushing against me Hard. I cannot breathe. I cannot move. I cannot do anything. I am suffocating. I just lie there helplessly As I am crushed. By my own misery.

Up the ladder: Fingers 'Round My Heart
Down the ladder: WHY

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5
Weighted score: 4.5965877
Overall Rank: 12530
Posted: July 22, 2002 1:38 PM PDT; Last modified: July 22, 2002 1:38 PM PDT
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Comments:
[n/a] razorgrin @ 142.166.109.217 | 22-Jul-02/1:46 PM | Reply
Dear god! The angst! It's attacking!!GAAAAHHHH!Run!Save yourselves!
[5] kawakurdi @ 62.6.94.229 | 22-Jul-02/1:46 PM | Reply
I read all your poems. Genuine feelings expressed clearly and simply. Why all this pessimism, desperation and pain and you are only 18? Look at the brighter side of life and its beautiful possibilities.
[7] ARTIE @ 66.68.148.241 | 22-Jul-02/3:10 PM | Reply
There is help available. Vallium, Darvocet, any narcotic will suffice. Take two, breathe deeply, and call me in the morning. The doctor is "In".
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