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Painty (Free verse) by wlshepherd
There was a painted man, Who walked a painted mile, And on his painted face, Was a painted smile. He wore a painted coat, Along with painted boots, And for his painted breakfast He ate un-painted fruits. He had a painting job, Was a piece of painted art, And when the people paid to paint him He played the painted part. After the painted walk, Back to his painted room, He fell into a painted sleep And then a painted tomb.

Up the ladder: Its raining
Down the ladder: moon rants

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.8333335
Weighted score: 5.6092153
Overall Rank: 2276
Posted: June 10, 2002 3:41 AM PDT; Last modified: June 10, 2002 3:41 AM PDT
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Comments:
[0] beakism @ 213.122.87.117 | 10-Jun-02/3:43 AM | Reply
Wow! Great Job! I like the way you've chosen a selection of actions a man might take, and described them as painted! Keep up the Good Work!!!
[8] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 12-Jul-02/3:48 PM | Reply
The Picasso Lasso,
[n/a] kawakurdi @ 213.122.143.133 | 29-Jul-02/12:20 PM | Reply
The combination or rather the unity of image and thought [paint] is well maintained from the beginning to end with an excellent end. Clear, readable, interesting and innovative.
[10] alexander @ 217.35.80.128 | 23-Aug-02/5:41 AM | Reply
You should patent it- 10/10
[9] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 23-Aug-02/7:55 AM | Reply
well rendered!
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