poemranker ::solace by crin

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Free verse № 1011

solace

by crin

Member since 2001 · Posted 20 Apr 2002 · 4 comments

i'm in such a bad mood i want you to soothe me i feel like a beast out of control out of my head i want you in bed underneath the sheets with me holding on tightly hold me tightly that's all i desire all i need

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4 comments

[9] nentwined 23-Apr-02/12:16 AM Reply
this has a really nice pounding flow. :)
[7] ErgoErgun 10-May-02/4:59 AM Reply
Not bad but not good. Ask yourself where you're going when you write. I understand your metaphysical inquiry into security and the savage, but it would make more sense if you framed the poem within a broader context - perhaps the human psyche. Make it anagogical. Tell me something.
[n/a] kawakurdi 31-Jul-02/4:00 PM Reply
More an underneath sheets whisper than a poem.
[0] poetandknowit 16-Aug-02/8:13 AM Reply
If you would have actually used images to convey this, you might have something resembling a poem. Unfortunately, you did do that. You told us everything and did not show us a thing.