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solace (Free verse) by crin

i'm in such a bad mood i want you to soothe me i feel like a beast out of control out of my head i want you in bed underneath the sheets with me holding on tightly hold me tightly that's all i desire all i need

ErgoErgun 10-May-02/4:59 AM
Not bad but not good. Ask yourself where you're going when you write. I understand your metaphysical inquiry into security and the savage, but it would make more sense if you framed the poem within a broader context - perhaps the human psyche. Make it anagogical. Tell me something.




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