on Passive Birth Control by http://mulberryfairy
23 Aug 2007, 8:39 PM
Good to see you writing again :)
on Pledge by http://mulberryfairy
23 Aug 2007, 8:38 PM
"I" absolutely adore this poem!
on She Crab by http://mulberryfairy
11 Oct 2004, 9:11 AM
A gorgeous moment. The gendering of the crab is intersting. Are you making a personal statement or merely recounting an event?
on the small drop by richa
26 Jan 2004, 10:50 AM
Wonderful, richa. Perhaps '..and weigh through it every angle'. I think it fits more with what you're getting at (or at least my simple understanding of your intent).
on Sequence by http://mulberryfairy
26 Jan 2004, 10:38 AM
Strangely exposed. I don't like 'strangely' here. It implies that you are a confused observer to yourself - not really understanding what is going on around you. It has the effect of distancing you (and therefore the reader) from the scene. Focus on the the nature of the wound that exposes the brain tissue and derive your adjective in that manner.
on A Parable Of War by Caducus
21 Nov 2003, 10:27 PM
Wonderful. Thank you.
replying on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 12:11 PM
Actually I agree with INTRANSIT, I was merely echoing your sentiment in my own confusing way.
on Memoirs IV by http://mulberryfairy
9 Nov 2003, 8:01 PM
I like your collection of snapshots. I didn't know they got hurricanes up in Maine, though. <~
replying on Greybie Blue by abecedarian
9 Nov 2003, 5:17 PM
Can I sing to you? Sing to you?
replying on Greybie Blue by abecedarian
8 Nov 2003, 7:35 PM
My terminal thanks to you
replying on Greybie Blue by abecedarian
8 Nov 2003, 7:33 PM
One with many loves
replying on Greybie Blue by abecedarian
8 Nov 2003, 7:29 PM
You should know me by now horus. Aren't I always trying to say something?
on Saint Peggy Seeger by Retaliate
4 Nov 2003, 10:41 PM
Do a google search on 'Song of Choice' to get lyrics,
then 'Peggy Seeger' to see the author.
then 'Peggy Seeger' to see the author.
replying on The Santa Anna's fire and red sun by Bachus
29 Oct 2003, 3:18 PM
I like your forecast better than mine: rain, rain, mudlside, catastrophic results. New landscape. Rebuilding on new unstable landscape. Rinse and repeat.
on The Santa Anna's fire and red sun by Bachus
29 Oct 2003, 2:54 PM
My prophetic soul! Remember I was bitching about how dry lake Arrowhead was ('Lake Arrowhead' Oct 19th, 2003)?
Good capture. Even in LA it looks like the fucking apocalypse, I can't imagine being at the place where the heart of the fire would be (if it had one).
Good capture. Even in LA it looks like the fucking apocalypse, I can't imagine being at the place where the heart of the fire would be (if it had one).
replying on comment-ary by nentwined
28 Oct 2003, 8:58 AM
well said (both your comment-ary and commentary)
on Right side by <~>
24 Oct 2003, 4:21 PM
Harmonic in its dissonance. Interesting, I like this description a great deal. It is a simple indication of an unresolved but accepted complexity.
My reading suggests the following change:
'a chorus harmonic in its six-legged dissonance,
never completely soothing the restlessness inside'
The second line reemphasizes the first I think (as opposed to contradicting it with a 'but').
Or maybe my reading was wrong - as can do.
My reading suggests the following change:
'a chorus harmonic in its six-legged dissonance,
never completely soothing the restlessness inside'
The second line reemphasizes the first I think (as opposed to contradicting it with a 'but').
Or maybe my reading was wrong - as can do.
replying on Three Fall by <~>
24 Oct 2003, 4:07 PM
absolutely
on rainfall saga 7 by Bill Z Bub
23 Oct 2003, 11:58 PM
Gonna need help Bill. smile 1, lure 1 , fingers 2, thundering 3, rain 5, at last 8 (intentional golden section? 1,1,2,3,5,8) but that's all I got.