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The Santa Anna's fire and red sun (Free verse) by Bachus
An eerie red filters through windows, people, pets & wild things I haven't seen the sky in two weeks The mountains that I was born under are as black as coal with a million crucifixes and lonely chimneys still holding onto something underneath three feet of ash and two hundred years of burnt pine fodder and brush. The creeks and rivers I fished as a boy run mud brown and molasses slow. A fire camp prisoner sits on a boulder overlooking the San Gabriel Valley and his possible run to freedom. But all would see his get away. Just as all can see the flame beast racing unhindered towards Big Bear. 11,000 firefighters many of which are prison inmates trained for this. Hand in hand with freemen and victims The ones that serve their time won't even be able to become firefighters in the free world due to their record. Killers against a truer killer. Rapists against a truer rapist. This fire has no heart. This wind tells it so.

Down the ladder: Mid-July

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Weighted score: 6.8048773
Overall Rank: 394
Posted: October 29, 2003 2:13 PM PST; Last modified: October 29, 2003 2:13 PM PST
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[9] abecedarian @ 164.67.82.153 | 29-Oct-03/2:54 PM | Reply
My prophetic soul! Remember I was bitching about how dry lake Arrowhead was ('Lake Arrowhead' Oct 19th, 2003)?

Good capture. Even in LA it looks like the fucking apocalypse, I can't imagine being at the place where the heart of the fire would be (if it had one).
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.116.54 > abecedarian | 29-Oct-03/3:05 PM | Reply
Mother fucking bark beetles. Here's a forecast: rain, rain, mudslide, mudslide, catastrophic results. new landscape. better fishing and camping 200 years from now.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.98 > Bachus | 29-Oct-03/3:10 PM | Reply
Here's a forecast for your acting career:

HBO gay erotica until 2010
Malcolm X retrospective in 2011
Premiere of Shrek 2 in 2012
Found dead with a rolled-up copy of Gilded Stumpes of Olde lodged in your ear in 2013 with a suicide note saying "KURDT KOBAIN"
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.116.54 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 29-Oct-03/3:19 PM | Reply
lol.

I was hoping to play John Stamos in the A&E special a life in times of a greek bisexual and do star trek ten the quest for spork also, is that okay?
[n/a] Wobble McFly @ 195.157.153.253 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 30-Oct-03/1:35 AM | Reply
LOLTTM!!!!!!!????????!!!!!!!!!!?>>>>>>>>>??????!?!???!!!!1111111
[9] richa @ 81.86.236.15 > Bachus | 29-Oct-03/3:13 PM | Reply
My forecast: the climates going to change, up or down, something to do with jet streams, CFC's.

Good poem by the way
[9] abecedarian @ 164.67.82.153 > abecedarian | 29-Oct-03/3:18 PM | Reply
I like your forecast better than mine: rain, rain, mudlside, catastrophic results. New landscape. Rebuilding on new unstable landscape. Rinse and repeat.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.98 | 29-Oct-03/3:17 PM | Reply
[X] Arbitrary line breaks
[X] Shit
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.116.54 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 29-Oct-03/3:23 PM | Reply
Is this why your mad?

"End of UsOde 6.41 14wcrystal lane swiftwNUDE ENVELOPMENT SITEFree verse 6.40 17-=Dark_Angel=-Window WatchingOde 6.40 17wcrystal lane swiftw".

Sandwiched between chrystals tight lips nude. you are a dandy!
and I don't blame you.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.98 > Bachus | 29-Oct-03/3:33 PM | Reply
I would take spunking on Nicholas Novi's discarded wig over facefucking wcrystal lane swiftw any day of the week. Except Sunday, obviously, when I'm in the Isolation Boothe.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.116.54 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 29-Oct-03/4:03 PM | Reply
Because your face is the only thing you have left to fuck with? Or because the boothe is just that lonely and prolonged?
Or is it that the slide between your both and theirs has recently become a doggy door?
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.102 > Bachus | 30-Oct-03/4:33 AM | Reply
Have you ever had more than one coherent thought in a row?
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.116.54 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 30-Oct-03/12:28 PM | Reply
No, but today I had my teeth cleaned?
[9] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.175.127 | 29-Oct-03/5:08 PM | Reply
awesome, quite enjoyable.
[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 163.1.234.221 | 29-Oct-03/5:29 PM | Reply
The Wind... It has so much to teach us.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.252.72 | 29-Oct-03/6:44 PM | Reply
Good job boning the sun. sans lube, sans foreplay, sans sandals. always. no. I don't like sloppy seconds. thanks anyway.
[2] Engelbert Humpalot @ 127.0.0.1 | 4-Feb-21/8:50 AM | Reply
Jolly nice
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