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8-Sep-03/1:15 PM |
A gargantuan feast of imagery and if this day of verse should be our last then leave me drunk upon this honeyed marrow and with a hearty laugh and heady brow I raise my tankard and toast ye now.
Bloody good show -1-0-
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| Re: (Untitled) by LuckyJoe |
8-Sep-03/1:19 PM |
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Not a bad effort at all, last line lover.7
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| Re: Trust by hobojo |
8-Sep-03/1:24 PM |
S1 is mixed up in the past and present tense and suggests the allegiance is to the rhyme rather than the point.
tryed is tried.
You're a good writer but this is not exemplary of your talent.
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| Re: Fury by J.B. Manning |
8-Sep-03/1:28 PM |
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We slipped in to sadness is a useful line which could be better used. For example you write it like you wore sadness (like your heart on your sleeve) all you need is a line like the 1st one but with a follow up line which really hits home.
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8-Sep-03/1:32 PM |
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Not intensely thought provoking but it does grab the attention and is written with a certain degree of eloquence, though the cliched ending disappoints. 6
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8-Sep-03/1:37 PM |
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Too much mustard and not enough dog.
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| Re: On getting back by horus8 |
9-Sep-03/4:54 AM |
Very vivid, thoroughfare.
welcome back and let the maddening begin
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15-Aug-04/7:46 AM |
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By jove this is dandy. One would remove the repetitiomn of 'i' in last stanza my boy.
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| Re: Bugs by INTRANSIT |
15-Aug-04/7:48 AM |
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Blast ! this is hot diggity dog a wonderful accomplishment, starlkly original.
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| Re: Holocaust by Mr Pig |
14-Sep-04/6:33 AM |
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This the original version to 'yellow star'
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| Re: The And women by INTRANSIT |
18-Jun-05/10:31 AM |
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hot diggity dog its bloody fantastic. 6th stanza good golly.
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| Re: Nights in the city of Godiva by Mr Pig |
1-Aug-06/4:36 AM |
one for the brits on this site, are their any left though?
Wrote this hoping the sarc meister that is stephen robins or dark angel would add their quips.
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| Re: A Poem For George Bush by Edna Sweetlove |
2-Aug-06/7:57 AM |
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| Re: I wish I was a chav by Stephen Robins |
2-Aug-06/8:03 AM |
My son Edgar Von Smythe the third has recently been dating a girl called Chelsea whom I suspect is 'Chavesque'. She has a potty mouth and last week I was about to enter his bedroom till he shouted 'Father do not come in, Chelsea is going down on me'
I had a feeling she was depressed and made her some earl grey but the ungrateful girl at least was being comforted by Edgar.
Edgar is my only child from my first wife Lai-Longtime from Thailand.
Nice poem it reeled me in my boy.
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| Re: Dear Maggie by Stephen Robins |
13-Sep-06/4:52 AM |
I met Brian Blessed once at Sherwood Forest when he was filming episode 5 of 'Robin of Sherwood'. I was an extra back then and if you watch very closely I am the Norman who fights him at the portcullis only to get an arrow in my thigh by Robin the hoodeth man.
Blessed was a smelly foul bumptuous cretin who moaned all the time that he should have played the part of Billy Corkhill in Brookside but was considered too fat.
Too bloody rotund more like.
Lovely poem anyway it kind of celebrates the feminine aura.
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| Re: Doubt by Dovina |
13-Sep-06/4:54 AM |
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Noah played a blinder didnt he?
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| Re: The Ice Soldier by MacFrantic |
13-Sep-06/4:55 AM |
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I was expecting he would have ended up as water.
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| Re: Solace by Miggy |
13-Sep-06/4:56 AM |
I've just sang this against Herb Alpert and the tijuana brass band with my accordion and by god its hot diggity dog.
Bravo my young fry.
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| Re: The Clock and the Storm by cleverdevice |
13-Sep-06/4:57 AM |
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Have you seen the avengers?
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| Re: Dear Maggie by Stephen Robins |
13-Sep-06/5:15 AM |
I was wondering would you be so kind as to peruse my new poem based on upper class people conversing in a local convenience store.
Kind Regards
Laurence Piggott-Smythe.
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