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Member since 2003 · Posted 7 Sep 2003 · 4 comments

Dance with the wind, Lead me on like the breeze, Set to each blade of grass, Freeze lightly cover heart with dew, Each beat, crack this thin layer. Run fingers through hair, Autumns rain falling without a care, Soothing with each caress of follicle, On end stand, Excited by the touch so inviting. Internal flame spreading, Slowly crawling upon ground, Surrounding obstacles in the way, Burn forever consuming soul, Soothing warmth never to be scorn, Words of beauty sworn truth. Eat the days one by one, Never indulge to your fill, Sit around the table forever talk, Starve for the dawning day, Watch the dusking, another one to rest.

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[0] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 7-Sep-03/2:58 PM Reply

Congratulations! It's not often one encounters such a generous expendature of voracity in poetry nowadays. The introspective rythm is simply sublime. Keep up the good work!!!

[n/a] LuckyJoe › ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 8-Sep-03/8:03 AM Reply

Thanks for the comment. I've been working to get better. I'm a spotty writing. Some of its good... and well some of its real shit. Think its like that for most everyone.

[7] Mr Pig 8-Sep-03/1:19 PM Reply

Not a bad effort at all, last line lover.7

[8] deleted user 8-Sep-03/10:42 PM Reply

I like this...it's fresh and alive. You've got a great flow going on here! Bravo~