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On getting back

Member since 2002 · Posted 8 Sep 2003 · Edited 8 Sep 2003 · 13 comments

On getting back; Who are you said plant to yr hazel. I am witch. I am your sore thumb. Glass explodes Death Gardel. & 7:30 comes. My grandfather has a flesh eating bacteria. 1966 jungle parasite. STAFF SEEPING IN GAUZE JESUS ANTI PALM PRINT. Black blood & full moon Pull push fog lighthouse Tahoe I lick my cold sore Who in the fuck are you. I am yr bad hand. I am yr rat trap snapping dragon poppy sac kneel cuspid slip yawn nap then twilight and Columbian guitar for my family aye yah yah yah yah yah. ku-cko ru cu-cko. I am yr long nail. When I luv for keeps. I keep. Mini van Arco Mexican eyelash & miniature cantalope When I was five I climbed trees. Yes trees I hid I was silent & forgetable I extended I still am. pulling from and to shadows. Now scratching at the shudder. rattle breath you do howl low you do still & yr mine, and only a vineyard and a grape walk and a long talk can save us now. Save us now and happen. Recording yr yesterdays. -- by the prince of storms & twilight.

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13 comments

[9] Bill Z Bub 8-Sep-03/10:56 PM Reply

Bello! beautiful, man. Imagery cut apart and stacked and exploded. Assimilated and studied and polished into a shiney black metal ball, just small enough to swallow.

[8] Mr Pig 9-Sep-03/4:54 AM Reply

Very vivid, thoroughfare.

welcome back and let the maddening begin

[n/a] horus8 › Mr Pig 10-Sep-03/1:08 PM Reply

Hello friend, yr'e always high up there in my book too.

[9] richa 9-Sep-03/7:41 AM Reply

image and ambiguity, violence
a fine piece

[n/a] horus8 › richa 10-Sep-03/1:07 PM Reply

Thanks, I love yr work too.

[10] J.B. Manning 9-Sep-03/3:29 PM Reply

Damn...that's one good piece. I'm impressed.

[n/a] horus8 › J.B. Manning 10-Sep-03/1:09 PM Reply

Thank you, but when I edit it next, it will soar.

[6] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 9-Sep-03/3:34 PM Reply

I think you may have neglected to arrange all of your lines into the corrcet order. Be more careful next time.

[10] Bachus › ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 9-Sep-03/9:10 PM Reply

No dave, i don't think that I will, but thanks for yr comment. I'll keep that in mind if I ever want to design a really kitsch usewername. lol.

[6] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? › Bachus 10-Sep-03/2:26 PM Reply

That's my real name as it appears on my birth certificate, I'll have you know.

[0] Lifeboatman 10-Sep-03/7:56 PM Reply

0... nothing...

[n/a] horus8 › Lifeboatman 11-Sep-03/12:58 PM Reply

Do you wish me to cry? Or are you just an oarless crank.

[9] deleted user 12-Sep-03/12:17 PM Reply

silent and forgetable..

Save us now and happen.

you have a way with words.
My grading of your poem is ridiculous and can't matter. why would you care what I say it's worth.
you've got it and I dont.
9 anyway.