| Re: a comment on Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe |
9-Aug-03/9:23 AM |
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Cliche are Ideas that are over used. Mostly anything classical is going to be cliche, because they are well tred words that have been used all to often, because someone saw them, or heard them and has repeated them. The thing about famous poems from the past is that they had there critics at there time too. I liked the point you tryed to make very valid, but this is today, not the days of yesteryear. I'm saying that its quite good, despite being cliche.
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| Re: a comment on Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe |
8-Aug-03/10:25 PM |
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A little harsh on the crit there don't you think? I mean after all, its not as bad as say, Museheart, or anything now is it?
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| Re: a comment on The Bunny, The Wench, and The Troll by Billy Fights |
8-Aug-03/9:02 PM |
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Thank you very much Horus. Coming from you that truly is a compliment.
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| Re: a comment on God is a Lady by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
8-Aug-03/8:52 PM |
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Thank you very much indeed Horus, and I agree. Only I think He likes to make it more personal than that. He likes to toy with them down on a sick perverted almost hostile, and definately Deranged level. He is most certainly a Jew.
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| Re: a comment on The Bunny, The Wench, and The Troll by Billy Fights |
8-Aug-03/6:09 PM |
Its actually Directed at this guy, who thought he'd be a smart ass and challenge me to a fight in my livejournal because I said some mean things about his girlfriend that he never even got to read. Mind you, they were all true things. If you want you may read the comments past between me, the wench, and the troll.
http://www.livejournal.com/users/pinkbunnyofdoom/
I find them to be a riot, so I thought I'd share my exploits.
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| Re: a comment on God is a Lady by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
8-Aug-03/4:38 PM |
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Thanks. I'd like to think that I've grown with every poem I've posted, but this is really a new spurt I guess. Thanks again.
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| Re: Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe |
8-Aug-03/12:31 PM |
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Definatly gotta be the top one. Go with what you like in poetry. Look never be unwilling to try something new but if it doesn't work out for you then don't do it. Simply put. The top version is well worth a -10- from me. The bottom would be an -8-. So here is a -10-.
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| Re: Undertow by eliastemplar |
8-Aug-03/12:26 PM |
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Um... Correct me if I'm wrong here but this isn't a Haiku right? I mean 5-7-5? This is 5, maybe 6, and 4. No vote from me on this one.
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| Re: a comment on Speaking my mind. Brilliant Idea! by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
7-Aug-03/4:41 PM |
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haha, bravo. Touche, and Thanks for a new Idea.
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| Re: My Fart Is Eternally Yours (Free Sniff) By Yo-Yo by DreamerSupreme |
7-Aug-03/2:14 PM |
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lol. You really do seem to have been studying under Horus. -10-.
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| Re: a comment on God is a Lady by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
7-Aug-03/12:53 PM |
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Horus would know. Check it out now.
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| Re: Inet. mag. editors R jealous red haired Jews, oh and I'm 29 by horus8 |
7-Aug-03/10:40 AM |
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lol. Happy Birthday Horus, Happy Birthday. -10-
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| Re: The Belgian Bookworm [revised] by DreamerSupreme |
7-Aug-03/2:21 AM |
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Needed more comparison to a king in his throne for the last line to have worked for me. -8-
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| Re: a comment on Speaking my mind. Brilliant Idea! by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
7-Aug-03/2:15 AM |
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lol. I didn't know that you could pardon blasphemy seeing as to how your looking at it in those terms.
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| Re: a comment on Speaking my mind. Brilliant Idea! by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
7-Aug-03/2:05 AM |
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What the hell? What are you talking about? This has nothing to do with actually being wounded.
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| Re: Yellow Cake for Everyone by Retaliate |
7-Aug-03/2:04 AM |
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Nice, that actually took me a second to get. -8- Just because I ended up laughing without really getting it until I read it a second time.
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| Re: Angel by mistaric |
7-Aug-03/1:53 AM |
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Yuck. If I knew the proper spelling of the sound of vomiting I'd do it right now. This poem is so trite that I didn't get past the second line of the 4th stanza. Have you no consideration for others? If this is the kinda of poetry your going to write, stop right now. I mean it. I rarely give zeros, but this deserves one too much. I'll be nice and leave it at where my comment stands. On the bright side at least it shouldn't be too hard to for improvement, cause hopefully not everything you'll write can be this bad. -0-
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| Re: Angel by abecedarian |
7-Aug-03/1:45 AM |
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Wierd, First that the poem right next to this is also entitled Angel, I wonder how often that kinda thing happens and second sex with an angel. I'm sorry I know there are lots of pictures of female angels and things but have you ever read about one in any religious doctrine? I haven't. Just wierd kiddo. Beautiful Imagery and well written in my opinion. Also wrong by those standards but whatever. -9-.
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| Re: a comment on My own Truism by Billy Fights |
5-Aug-03/2:29 AM |
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Maybe, but how many 4th grade poems do you see here? I'm really getting into childrens poetry for some odd reason.
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| Re: a comment on American Eden by Don-Quixote |
4-Aug-03/1:02 PM |
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I could, but not without some thermo nuclear goggles and a qp.
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