Re: My Pain 2004 by ToMuchPain04	10-Apr-04/2:02 AM
Who Do You Think Your Kidding? You Call This A Free Verse? Pimple, Its Called A Pimple, And ITS TERRIBLE! There is no depth, nothing more than whining, and trying to rhyme. Learn about the art, before you stumble thru another rhyme session with boo-woo your host Bandaid Butter Fingers! -0-
Re: Three Bears by hotwire	10-Apr-04/1:55 AM
Good the of the Idea of comparing Teddy Bears, something comforting, to Men, without a doubt a odd territory. The execution is overly simplifed and a bit flailing to hold its self together but works out fairly well at the end. -8-
Re: a comment on Shampoo and Condition by Luzr	7-Apr-04/12:42 PM
Twelve? Come now, I'm not that old. Why I'd almost be to the point of Midlife Crisis in this Day and Age were I near so old as Twelve. I'm only 7.576 years old.
Re: My heart had a war...no body won by sonawrote	7-Apr-04/11:55 AM
Childish Longing, followed by Adult Realization. The first few stanza's(Thanks Zodiac for making that happen) Seemed a tad pouty and rather brat like, but the last few show true wisdom. -10-
Re: a comment on Shampoo and Condition by Luzr	7-Apr-04/11:27 AM
I don't suffer hangovers. I never have. I either wake up sober or drunk, no pain what so ever.
Re: a comment on Shampoo and Condition by Luzr	7-Apr-04/11:25 AM
Its not talking about drunks, yes it centers around one, but he's what is putting himself in the cycle. We do it, day by day. We set ourselves on the same paths we followed the day before, and wonder why things are so dull, or always so painful. Thats what I'm talking about here. Constant conditioning of self.
Re: love comes but once by francis nor capule	2-Apr-04/10:02 AM
That is the sappiest thing I've ever read. To say the least its wretched. To say the most its honest but lacking in both the wonder that is love and the writing that is poetry. I hope this impressed your "lover" because thats the only person you should have shared this set of words with. This type of peom is whats known as a Pimple. I should know I've written alot of them before they even had it as a poem type. Read more verse. Good Verse. Then try writing. Exsamples here being -=Dark_Angel=- to show you shear verbal skill and intelligence, Godswife and Horus8(In his many different usernames) for depth, humor, and emotion. -2- Just because its honest, horrid, but honest.
Re: a comment on Shampoo and Condition by Luzr	2-Apr-04/9:38 AM
I have no idea what a hangover feels like, much less radiation, so I'm gonna say both but niether in the way you are thinking
Re: a comment on Shampoo and Condition by Luzr	2-Apr-04/9:35 AM
Beautiful. Just beautiful. The point is meaninglessness. And it took you a whole of what? 10 seconds? 15? I bow before you, oh mighty understander of all things written.
Re: a comment on Twilight Affair by thepinkbunnyofdoom	30-Mar-04/11:21 PM
I know, I know but considering that I've been writing... Well its an improvement. To say the least. I'll edit it when I return for good. This is just a visit, But fear not, I shall soon be returning from the rabbit hole(These woods are getting a little lonely if you know what I mean), Plus I can't seem to get more than eight chapters into a story before finding something wrong with the key point I'm trying to get across in the overview. I'm sure thats affected by the constant partying I've been doing. I miss you too Smart Ass. <3 Jason
Re: I Married an Infectious Woman (My Love, 'Futility') by SupremeDreamer	30-Mar-04/12:42 PM
Much Improvement! I am indeed impressed. -10-
Re: peppermint by the indign	30-Mar-04/12:34 PM
Interesting to say the least. Which I'm not known for that. I enjoyed it, and admit it, who wouldn't? It was off the wall and lacking a bit in grammer(But hey like most poets from the before the 20s aren't). -9-
Re: Scattered Spaces by embersandenvelopes	30-Mar-04/12:28 PM
Lovely words, and I must agree. We are.
Re: Dancing on Glass by thepinkbunnyofdoom	13-Oct-03/10:48 AM
Still not back but I had a strong urge to write something to be thought about.
Re: a comment on So Long for now by thepinkbunnyofdoom	7-Sep-03/12:03 AM
Army? What? Nadda. I thought about it, realized oh wait, I like thinking for myself and said fuck that.
Re: Confession of a troubled man by Hostileintent	31-Aug-03/11:27 AM
I liked it but I think the last verse could go. I love the breaking up of persons ality, clever. -7-
Re: Be the best, and nothing but by Hostileintent	31-Aug-03/11:23 AM
Nice all round. The an in the first line peaks my curiousity a little but I've seen it before. I think you should have kept the repeat of 2nd and 4th line going til the end, but other than that a -8-. I see potential.
Re: How we found Jesus by Jeremi B. Handrinos	10-Aug-03/7:50 PM
Without a doubt, a masterpiece. That was Ace. -10-
Re: To PinkBunnyofDoom by Vanity	10-Aug-03/7:32 PM
Hmmm... Your name suits you.
Re: Speaking my mind. Brilliant Idea! by thepinkbunnyofdoom	10-Aug-03/7:24 PM
This was once in second place, but see what one little zero can do to your average?