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Speaking my mind. Brilliant Idea! (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom
Today I grabbed a cross made of paper and began a symbolic march With a pen stabbed in my right side and crown of irony digging into my brow With clothes pins they hung my burden to flap in the breeze Paperclips stabbed through my ankles and arms to pin me to place They told me take it back Stop speaking your mind and how you feel Nothings gonna happen if you do To which I replyed what would that prove So here I stand, a simple mockery A modern day martyr for watered down Ideas Staring you in the eye and laughing Is this the best you can do?

Up the ladder: Dying Abroad
Down the ladder: Diminishing

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.857143
Weighted score: 6.852551
Overall Rank: 308
Posted: August 7, 2003 1:36 AM PDT; Last modified: August 7, 2003 1:36 AM PDT
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[7] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.168.89 | 7-Aug-03/2:03 AM | Reply
cmon you damned furry mammal, are you still whining about that old wound of yours?

Its time to move onto some fresh wounds. 7
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223 > DreamerSupreme | 7-Aug-03/2:05 AM | Reply
What the hell? What are you talking about? This has nothing to do with actually being wounded.
[7] DreamerSupreme @ 204.31.165.80 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 7-Aug-03/6:26 AM | Reply
"They told me take it back
Stop speaking your mind and how you feel"

you mistaken the physical for the mental
digesting my comment with the literal
comprehension that a monkey does posses
your pink fluffy dress
is soiled from mud stains
it is all that remains
of your furry armor.


cmon man, really, you should think more about what your eyes read.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223 > DreamerSupreme | 7-Aug-03/4:41 PM | Reply
haha, bravo. Touche, and Thanks for a new Idea.
[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 66.81.157.234 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 8-Aug-03/3:37 PM | Reply
I know, im skull-fucking-fantastic. ;]

Your welcome, I guess im your sadistic muse.

Btw, thats $3000.00- We Accept Visa/Mastercard.
[10] Billy Fights @ 24.209.21.223 > SupremeDreamer | 8-Aug-03/5:11 PM | Reply
Eww.. both of those are maxed out, will you except my Discover?
[7] Retaliate @ 4.46.73.15 | 7-Aug-03/2:10 AM | Reply
I am your patron saint. I absolve you.
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223 > Retaliate | 7-Aug-03/2:15 AM | Reply
lol. I didn't know that you could pardon blasphemy seeing as to how your looking at it in those terms.
[7] Retaliate @ 164.67.82.153 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 8-Aug-03/3:22 PM | Reply
Canonized these martyrs make
with subtle delicate haste

to absolve their mental kindred men
of those sins for which there is no end
[9] Mr Pig @ 62.105.119.105 | 7-Aug-03/4:16 AM | Reply
You've improved a lot.
[7] richa @ 81.86.254.141 | 7-Aug-03/6:27 AM | Reply
first two verses are your best yet

the rest sounds a bit of a lecture though
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223 | 10-Aug-03/7:24 PM | Reply
This was once in second place, but see what one little zero can do to your average?
[n/a] nentwined @ 209.31.226.178 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 15-Aug-03/4:40 PM | Reply
funny how averages work, neh? I see it's back up there.
[9] JoyLuck @ 68.75.23.95 | 12-Aug-03/11:33 PM | Reply
oh wow the first part
blew me away
[10] Hostileintent @ 159.134.55.73 | 13-Aug-03/4:21 AM | Reply
I like it.Very symbolic.

question:any chance you could look and review mine, the last two on my list?
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