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Scattered Spaces (Free verse) by embersandenvelopes
In the absence of green, I am filled by one-block notations on scattered spaces and narrow stairwells. The concrete stings the sky while the clips below and criss-crossed highways above house the scent of Krispie Kremes. Then we are exposed- me in my uncertainty and everything else in its armour. From traffic caught like a spider's bedtime treat to casual chatter flung between thick accents and theives, we are all involved in linear interpretations.

Up the ladder: Never Let Go
Down the ladder: A Wishful Way Of Life

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Weighted score: 5.0448236
Overall Rank: 7004
Posted: March 28, 2004 11:11 PM PST; Last modified: March 28, 2004 11:11 PM PST
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[7] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 29-Mar-04/5:06 PM | Reply
and so.... ?

again, need more context methinks.

Some nice language though.
[n/a] embersandenvelopes @ 24.152.203.178 > Shuushin | 5-Apr-04/12:31 AM | Reply
use your imagination :)
[7] zodiac @ 67.240.155.208 > embersandenvelopes | 5-Apr-04/5:14 AM | Reply
May I say, bow'ls?
[8] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 66.213.67.10 | 30-Mar-04/12:28 PM | Reply
Lovely words, and I must agree. We are.
[2] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 | 2-Jun-04/6:03 AM | Reply
This is the most pretentious guff ever to have been emitted outside of Channel 4's lesbian unit.

Splattered Faces would be a better title.

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