| Re: Angel by mistaric |
7-Aug-03/1:53 AM |
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Yuck. If I knew the proper spelling of the sound of vomiting I'd do it right now. This poem is so trite that I didn't get past the second line of the 4th stanza. Have you no consideration for others? If this is the kinda of poetry your going to write, stop right now. I mean it. I rarely give zeros, but this deserves one too much. I'll be nice and leave it at where my comment stands. On the bright side at least it shouldn't be too hard to for improvement, cause hopefully not everything you'll write can be this bad. -0-
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7-Aug-03/1:58 AM |
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Damn fine story telling her. The idea of a Drunken Muse, Who inspires inspiration even though its seems like she is just rambling on aimlessly. You've got an instant Classic here. -10-
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7-Aug-03/2:00 AM |
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Fairly nice story telling here. -8-
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| Re: Yellow Cake for Everyone by Retaliate |
7-Aug-03/2:04 AM |
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Nice, that actually took me a second to get. -8- Just because I ended up laughing without really getting it until I read it a second time.
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7-Aug-03/2:10 AM |
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lol. Hopefully tomorrow you aren't its ashes. -10-
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| Re: The Belgian Bookworm [revised] by DreamerSupreme |
7-Aug-03/2:21 AM |
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Needed more comparison to a king in his throne for the last line to have worked for me. -8-
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| Re: Inet. mag. editors R jealous red haired Jews, oh and I'm 29 by horus8 |
7-Aug-03/10:40 AM |
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lol. Happy Birthday Horus, Happy Birthday. -10-
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7-Aug-03/2:11 PM |
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Amazing, I was wondering where my other chuck taylor went. -10-
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| Re: My Fart Is Eternally Yours (Free Sniff) By Yo-Yo by DreamerSupreme |
7-Aug-03/2:14 PM |
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lol. You really do seem to have been studying under Horus. -10-.
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8-Aug-03/12:22 PM |
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Simple, but it has its own sorta charm to it. -10-
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| Re: Undertow by eliastemplar |
8-Aug-03/12:26 PM |
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Um... Correct me if I'm wrong here but this isn't a Haiku right? I mean 5-7-5? This is 5, maybe 6, and 4. No vote from me on this one.
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| Re: Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe |
8-Aug-03/12:31 PM |
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Definatly gotta be the top one. Go with what you like in poetry. Look never be unwilling to try something new but if it doesn't work out for you then don't do it. Simply put. The top version is well worth a -10- from me. The bottom would be an -8-. So here is a -10-.
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8-Aug-03/10:38 PM |
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Very good, well written. As for god, I have explained why she doesn't answer anyone. Too many Children, None of them raising their hands, all talking out of turn. Its Tragic really. -10-
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| Re: Speaking my mind. Brilliant Idea! by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
10-Aug-03/7:24 PM |
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This was once in second place, but see what one little zero can do to your average?
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| Re: To PinkBunnyofDoom by Vanity |
10-Aug-03/7:32 PM |
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Hmmm... Your name suits you.
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| Re: How we found Jesus by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
10-Aug-03/7:50 PM |
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Without a doubt, a masterpiece. That was Ace. -10-
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| Re: Be the best, and nothing but by Hostileintent |
31-Aug-03/11:23 AM |
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Nice all round. The an in the first line peaks my curiousity a little but I've seen it before. I think you should have kept the repeat of 2nd and 4th line going til the end, but other than that a -8-. I see potential.
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| Re: Confession of a troubled man by Hostileintent |
31-Aug-03/11:27 AM |
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I liked it but I think the last verse could go. I love the breaking up of persons ality, clever. -7-
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| Re: Dancing on Glass by thepinkbunnyofdoom |
13-Oct-03/10:48 AM |
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Still not back but I had a strong urge to write something to be thought about.
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| Re: Scattered Spaces by embersandenvelopes |
30-Mar-04/12:28 PM |
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Lovely words, and I must agree. We are.
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