regarding some deleted poem...	17-Dec-02/6:45 PM
this is actually good i must say i was expecting the worst, i might of ended it the the god in this, because then the second stanza comes along and spikes it down just a sliver, but a sliver still..i don't know (maybe i'm paranoid, but i've read enough poems on this sight to recognize certain writers, so whatever at this point right?) have a 7..
Re: February by BenRice	18-Dec-02/7:27 PM
i know iknow, do one called February forever, and make it about(you're never gonna believe, this) cold weather mixed with emotion.
Re: of people and places (final cut)I by INTRANSIT	18-Dec-02/7:33 PM
don't do it man. slowly back away from the universal mind thing.it's a trick. read sidhartha. friction creates. break the tiles make a mosaic. a pleasent poem though still.
regarding some deleted poem...	18-Dec-02/8:01 PM
what's up mr. reynolds? i read your e-mail to mr. weisman..that's funny shit. it can't be that bad can it? when do you meet her parents. shwing. my truck got towed in venice last night. i still have a headache. fucking tequilla and red wine could send an army in the wrong direction. beautifull moon tonight huh..well...i'm off to pay milton back and michael josts in germany, so i was fucked walking around all day with my gretch, but i rode the bus baby..the blue bus..it's calling us..see you i'm off to collect.
regarding some deleted poem...	19-Dec-02/10:12 AM
god no. not the hand me down trumpet. sweet jesus not concophony. ye have stoned my ureter with your complex layers of wisdom.
Re: UltraSound by UnityMitford	19-Dec-02/10:15 AM
unfortunately. miscariage.
Re: Holding On by Katie2	19-Dec-02/10:20 AM
the shaft of his gun? Are you fucking high? "to the kids that have past through the walls of my virginity"? hahah the flood that kicked us down...its like hallmark on bad acid naked and duct taped to the new humvee with seth green and his posse driving you around while the backstreet boys make sweet love to the back of your backwards baseball cap. you should be rubber banded to death. patti smith should give you a left handed wedgie.
Re: joyriding by Bill Z Bub	19-Dec-02/10:33 AM
fomented? formented. and you guys call me paranoid. tsk.
Re: no cure by New Life Drug	19-Dec-02/10:38 AM
distasters? the last time i provoked one of those it chased me down the street with a whiffle ball bat, and it was like "ookey wooki chueki chew..chewy chick chick wa wicky chew." and you know what i did? i happily wept and ran for my life. tsk. and please don't smash the cloud. thanks.
Re: Time by marvelis	19-Dec-02/10:45 AM
well...if anything..this poem helped me appreciate my coffe a bit more. take a three, and go back to your fucking hobbit riddles. you're about as marvelis as 90210 re-runs hith a midget riding around a saddled bull mastiff naked with a tin foil hat and cap gun. galavanting around my house while a constantly hit rewind play rewind play tookie hat play smookie hey! PLAY BOMBAY! hey! hey hat! HAY! HAY! HAY! fuck.. broke a nail. shit.
Re: Fact of the Matter by marvelis	19-Dec-02/10:51 AM
do you think if i blow-gunned anna nicole smith while she was holding court to her fucking lawyer and interior designer i could kill them all..i mean..you know with the right wind and timimg?
Re: UltraSound by UnityMitford	19-Dec-02/11:08 AM
i wasn't kidding, nor was i trying to be funny. there was a miscarriage, because she was on that shot thing which does something (weaken the lining of the uterus? and the embryo doesn't fasten slides down becomes tubal hemorrages blood, emergency care..vacuuming..half smile guilt no conversation on the way home. SO DON'T FUVCKING TELL ME WHJAT. I MADE A FUCKING COMMENT ABOUT A PIUUECE THAT REMINDED ME OF A SITUATION i went through LASt week called a miscarriage i put it down just because i'm like that. get it it made me think of thast i put it down..i don't need to play fucking mind games with people to get off..get that? i wasn't trying to be fucking funny, so go fuck yourself.
Re: fa11ing by Bill Z Bub	19-Dec-02/3:07 PM
i enjoyed your sketch work,and the comics. You're quite talented.
Re: Fragment by goldfish	20-Dec-02/10:48 AM
your so intelligent to call this fragment, because it is? pretty though, my problem with poetry like this is that it doesn't lose anything to gain anything...it doesn't take any chances..it's what i would term 'safe' poetry. In other words it wont change the world, but maybe a fragment of the world like the ivory coast? also, because it is missing that last rhyming stanza to push it over the top, you will continue to not get tens, but nines christof. i'm sure some schmuch will come along and be like omg and give it a ten within the next ten minutes, but i feel robbed..totally second placed..wich isn't necessarily bad all the time. i guess.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Dec-02/12:10 PM
we are apes in our caves. Cuz the 'real' secrets of men we'll take to our graves.r
Re: terrorism and break dancing by w~* ATHENA *~w	20-Dec-02/1:58 PM
kool.atleast it's not t.s eliot. is it? merry christmas and all that other arm funk.
regarding some deleted poem...	20-Dec-02/2:12 PM
yeah some guy in germany took out an ad to kill someone and someone showed up and they ate his weiner? and then they guy killed him. finally. cute hey! so i wrote that bachus nut thing, anyway i got an aud to fly to write now (drive really) semen's cellular? lol. on a more serious note/ peter called me last night with testicular cancer! swear to god. i was blown away, so i cheered him up and told him the german weiner story and said at least he's still got us, chemo, his weiner, and a nut still"..how fucking weird is life..peter? wow, mind numbing..anyway, i had him rolling in like minutes he was all "jeremi, i have testicular cancer" and i could hear his voice break, and there was like this long pause, then i said all like shocked BOTH!? and then there was this other pause. then we both started laughing hysterically it was really moving.>
Re: Curse by OneFingerAnswer	20-Dec-02/4:05 PM
line 9 typo, beautifull and true.??
Re: I have no Idea?...? by brazen	20-Dec-02/4:10 PM
"foozle" sweet. preys gotta go back to pray. "empty acres take up more space then muddled cities", might works better moved to the last stanza. perhaps not, subways scare the hell out of me and so does the sky. usually.m
Re: Come Back to Me by jlanza	20-Dec-02/4:14 PM
i should of finger banged you harder, but with my cactus, and a handful of dry mud. three hundred miles? that's not love sweety that's a mild crush. love, is a talking brain tumor and a late cable bill w/ a bit of movie popcorn in your hair..