| Re: Bloodsucker by hobojo |
17-Jan-03/10:49 AM |
rhyme scheme, OK
but the rhythm is amiss.
a fine poem, but not really limericky.
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| Re: horus8 by sooz |
17-Jan-03/10:47 AM |
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| Re: A Short Letter by Ranger |
15-Jan-03/9:45 AM |
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nit witty, but succinct. bravo.
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| Re: AIDS Bonanza! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
15-Jan-03/9:43 AM |
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tremendously brave and reverent (sorry)...downright boy scouty, i must say!
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| Re: The blue light special. by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
15-Jan-03/9:42 AM |
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last line should rhyme with the first two.
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| Re: Bobjim, Jimbob by Spider-Man |
15-Jan-03/9:41 AM |
knob?
Also, I'm seeing a pattern here of people making fun of one another. I hope its all in good fun.
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| Re: perversions 2: the revenge by razorgrin |
15-Jan-03/9:40 AM |
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very nicely done. bravo and two shakes.
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| Re: Jockey by betty swallox |
15-Jan-03/9:38 AM |
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a bit wordy--it muddles up the pace.
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| Re: Cat by Topaz Servias |
15-Jan-03/9:38 AM |
Limericks use the distinctive rhyming scheme of a-a-b-b-a, where the first two lines set the scene, the third and fourth lines quickly twist things about, and the fifth line hammers the conclusion. (first, second, and fifth lines are trimeter, third and fourth are dimeter).
this is from the help screen, not my original writing.
Limericks focus on the absurd or the silly when they're not downright naughty.
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| Re: Mommy, why does -=DarkAngel=- use 'an' so much? by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
15-Jan-03/9:36 AM |
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I suppose its all in good fun. I was a smidge distracted by the lack of line break separating the rhymes in the 3rd line of each limerick.
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| Re: Track.... by Topaz Servias |
15-Jan-03/9:33 AM |
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| Re: Frustration by DewDrop |
7-Jan-03/8:56 AM |
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I like this a lot, but I think you may have misclassified it as a limerick.
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| Re: A christmas thought by keatsImnot |
18-Dec-02/6:46 AM |
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a nice poem to read to your family. maybe you could make a christmas special, charlie brown...
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| Re: FHjk by Dark Angle |
10-Dec-02/11:39 AM |
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| Re: The Spankbox by Garrett S Sexton |
5-Dec-02/7:30 AM |
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the last line is inconsistant and base. it interrupts the flow and tone.
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| Re: Society by Garrett S Sexton |
5-Dec-02/6:18 AM |
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Let's not confuse vulgarity with art.
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| Re: Basic comedy by Garrett S Sexton |
5-Dec-02/6:15 AM |
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| Re: rain by skinda |
26-Nov-02/12:18 PM |
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rather trite. rather redundant. try for fresher images.
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| Re: stung by Limness |
26-Nov-02/12:17 PM |
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| Re: A meeting at Maverick, then dinner. by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
25-Nov-02/10:31 AM |
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