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The Spankbox (Free verse) by Garrett S Sexton Nominated for eviction, snake in the grass,
eight whores in heaven all virgins to the last.
Cherries, wine and roses, all whipped are my eyes,
shower me with pleasure, a reign of pain they devise.
Gifted are the slaven that they let one slip in,
A head full of flies, drugged full of sin.
Martyred is the sinner for sins you cannot cast
Pleasure is pain, the rest is tits and arse.
Up the ladder:
Black Hearted Graffiti Writer
Down the ladder:
Thunder
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Posted: July 26, 2002 3:50 PM PDT; Last modified: July 26, 2002 3:50 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.5 Overall Rank: 12805 Comments:
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horus8 @ 24.126.113.154
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26-Jul-02/4:20 PM
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okay so you are good, but can you balance breast milk around the brim of your hat Mr. sexton. p.s. if u live near melrose and mansfield u can come by tonight and read your piece then throw a midget for a prize. nine lives. whiskey. fuckshorts. Abyss. asp. cleopatra
good flow. umm. I don't get "slaven". and "pain they devise" feels like one syllable too many. and I really don't get the hell what you're saying, if you are saying anything...
the last line is inconsistant and base. it interrupts the flow and tone.
shut up!
great title. too bad nobody cares.
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