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The Spankbox (Free verse) by Garrett S Sexton

Nominated for eviction, snake in the grass, eight whores in heaven all virgins to the last. Cherries, wine and roses, all whipped are my eyes, shower me with pleasure, a reign of pain they devise. Gifted are the slaven that they let one slip in, A head full of flies, drugged full of sin. Martyred is the sinner for sins you cannot cast Pleasure is pain, the rest is tits and arse.

Robert K Foster 5-Dec-02/7:30 AM
the last line is inconsistant and base. it interrupts the flow and tone.




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