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stung (Free verse) by Limness
With my eyes closed, Tender and swollen at half a dose Only the lids were seared. I was not afraid to look But searching brought this fresh burnt blush That makes them look so blue-- and if you would only drown in them, this salt would surely lose its sting as I would do in you

Up the ladder: The beauty of a bird
Down the ladder: The futillity of charity.

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7643
Posted: November 26, 2002 12:11 PM PST; Last modified: November 26, 2002 12:11 PM PST
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[9] Robert K Foster @ 209.68.64.1 | 26-Nov-02/12:17 PM | Reply
I like the mystery
[n/a] Limness @ 67.84.171.10 > Robert K Foster | 30-Nov-02/4:55 PM | Reply
thank you. would you like to know the source?
[n/a] god'swife @ 209.178.176.34 | 2-Dec-02/8:07 AM | Reply
Try leaving the last line off. what do you think? If not could you tell me what it's like, to drown in him/her?
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