| Re: First date (for Larry, a lesbian vampire) by Bachus |
15-Oct-02/2:18 PM |
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A wise entity once said:" I vant to lick your girlfreind! Bweah!" I'm entertained.
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| Re: Child of my Buttocks by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. |
15-Oct-02/2:16 PM |
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Fan-fookin-tastic. truly an epic for the ages. I enjoy it greatly.
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| Re: more{Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8 |
11-Oct-02/7:03 AM |
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quality porn poems. dirty in a wonderful way.
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| Re: Hit & Run by horus8 |
11-Oct-02/6:58 AM |
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I like the "back of a honda". Sounds like quite a time.
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| Re: Pilgrim by timfowler |
11-Oct-02/6:46 AM |
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Now this, i like this. great imagery.
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| Re: Theoretical Islamic Math by Bachus |
11-Oct-02/6:39 AM |
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| Re: Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass |
11-Oct-02/6:35 AM |
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Sorry someone you knew is dead. That said, I'm afraid I agree with Dark Angel. This isn't that great a piece of writing. It's pretty cliched and really, what do you know of his motivation? The piece lacks fire if that was what you were going for and also sadness if that was your goal. I came in with an open mind for this one, but I was disappointed.
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| Re: Drunken note #2 by blackball |
9-Oct-02/7:05 AM |
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Pay no attention to jigg. I'm not usually one for this strucure, but damn fine work.
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| Re: rapping on caffeine by blackball |
9-Oct-02/7:03 AM |
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That's really damn good. Short but says a lot.
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| Re: The Good Old Days in New Orleans by cobalt |
1-Oct-02/11:12 AM |
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| Re: Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof |
1-Oct-02/11:10 AM |
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Definitely in the heart. This is very beautiful. Sometimes it bothers me about how people develop blind spots for themselves. The rhythm is gorgeous.
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| Re: The Astronomer's Lament by Christof |
23-Sep-02/7:28 AM |
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that's beautiful. The last 3 lines make it perfect. what can i say, i'm a sucker for space.
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| Re: Like and Unlike by Christof |
20-Sep-02/7:07 AM |
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The first death i remember was when an old man died on the street on my way to school. they hadn't covered him when i showed up. This poem evokes my memories of that so perfectly. Very real. uncontrived.
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| Re: Tugboats by poetandknowit |
20-Sep-02/7:01 AM |
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Doggie, though P&K is a lot of things, he posts what i assume to be his own poetry. you don't. you are a plagirizing little hack, robbing the graves of witers you could never be.
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| Re: Fleas by bigbigdog |
19-Sep-02/1:41 PM |
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I never thought it would come to this, but p&K is right. plagiarists must be broken on the wheel after being skinned alive. that's just pathetic. Go away, doggie. you need to be put to sleep.
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| Re: a comment on Walls by razorgrin |
19-Sep-02/1:36 PM |
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thanks. It is a heart metaphor as well as a fact.(wall colour) I like definite articles.
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| Re: a comment on A Passing Love by razorgrin |
19-Sep-02/1:34 PM |
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we have studied human sacrifices and tooth-brushing. I'll do a little write-up on yours.
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| Re: a comment on A Passing Love by razorgrin |
18-Sep-02/7:15 AM |
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sorry honey. being canadian, my southern-englishness lacks a lot. The poem is set in england, though. Thanks for the compliment though.The poem was just meant to be a story, and some failed to realize it.yay for Christof! Off to ritual studies for me.
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| Re: lovely by pink_punk_kisses87 |
18-Sep-02/6:55 AM |
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my necrophilia poem was better. the "limp hair" bit makes me think of a shampoo ad. "stand up and at your open coffin and smile"is a little awkward."I look at how your eyes gently fall upon the other." makes very little sense. Also, a body in a coffin has been embalmed. its lips aren't salty, they're chemically. They're only salty if they're very fresh, more if they're sweaty or bloody or have tears spilled on them. I'm only saying, objectively of course, that you should get the mechanics of death right before you write.
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| Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8 |
31-Aug-02/4:35 PM |
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no earwigs, they are made of evil.So, g'night everyone.
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