Re: a comment on Once by phoenixxx	14-Jun-03/12:10 PM
dfakjgruehgoahrhioaeeohirgegaerniopnipeanhierilrenklarwgn;n;bknoairneogeraonirea who's a fucking moron?
Re: a comment on Triolet, for Jason by beakism	6-Jun-03/3:00 PM
In any case, before you go on for several pages defending yourself, I really just felt like writing a poem; while I was taking a shower, the two lines came to me, and the rest of the words fitted together quite nicely. That, and the fact that you smell of wee.
Re: a comment on Triolet, for Jason by beakism	6-Jun-03/2:55 PM
well. I have been well and truly told. from your incessant babbling about -=Dark_Angel=-'s alleged plagiarism, it really doesn't seem that you do know jack; or that, if you do, you refuse to apply your knowledge. or, if neither of the above, simply that you have no notion of consistency. I seem to recall you telling me that you wouldn't be done for libel, since you'd only said something a few times, and the next minute (or, rather, six minutes later) telling -=Dark_Angel=- that the bare fact of him mentioning something once, without any meaning behind it, was enough to get him sued. Seems pretty plausible, if you ask me. So next time you assume you can capitalise indiscriminately, or spell wildly incorrectly, make sure you can.
Re: this feeling by gmoney8469	6-Jun-03/5:34 AM
I see you've worked hard at making original and inventive rhymes: mind mine mine mine time good work. 10.
Re: AIDS Bonanza! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	6-Jun-03/5:31 AM
I think, having conquered the realm of AIDS limericks, you should move on to more challenging ground, such as AIDS triolets. I've written one to start you off: I recently contracted a virus called AIDS from having gay sex with a homo. Now I'll have to give up butt raids: I recently contracted a virus called AIDS. It all started out as a game of charades And now I can't have bum sex no mo. I recently contracted a virus called AIDS from having gay sex with a homo.
Re: Fit In by A Simple Poet 123	27-May-03/5:30 AM
yeah, no one understands us asl?
Re: a comment on Unmasking Wyverns by horus8	21-May-03/1:15 PM
I don't have a problem with what a vilanelle is; what I was saying is that I don't see how the repetitions fit with the poem, other than being repeated for the sake of the poem being a vilanelle.
Re: Unmasking Wyverns by horus8	19-May-03/2:28 PM
it's great, and all, but I don't quite see how the repeated lines fit in with the pairs of lines before their repetitions; it seems they're only repeated for the sake of the form of the poem.
Re: a comment on Ode To Mushroomhead by Beseech	16-May-03/9:03 AM
Ye-es Are You German? If Not, Why Do You Feel The Need To Capitalize Everything?
Re: a comment on Hard Times by beakism	14-Sep-02/12:29 AM
Ah, but is there any poetry but theft? And in any case, how dare you besmirch my bad name: I would never consider the dastardity required to thieve an entire work.
Re: winter every day (Don't bother reading this) by unknown	13-Sep-02/2:15 PM
I have a friend who has a friend (well, maybe not a friend, but he knows him in any case), who decided, one winter, he'd make some money by clearing the ice and snow from people's driveways. His technique was a masterful stroke of genius - he splashed hot water on the drive, melting the ice and thus clearing the danger. Unfortunately, this boy neglected to consider what would happen when his hot water became less hot, and froze, and turned into black ice.
Re: a comment on 9/11 by dougsoderstrom	13-Sep-02/2:08 PM
be wary, pete... as many less fortunate souls have found out, doug gets violent at the first hint of questioning his poetry.
Re: 9/11 by dougsoderstrom	13-Sep-02/1:19 PM
doug, I am astounded at your ability to respond to points that were never made. Perhaps if you were more willing to consider criticism, people would accept your arguments; but you seem determined to hide behind the 'sensitive' nature of this poem in an attempt to deflect criticism. But most of the criticism you have received does not concern the subject of the poem (criticism which, I believe, is well justified); instead it attacks the execution of the poem. By posting your poem on this forum you open yourself to criticism, yet you refuse to face it, instead insisting that anybody who dislikes the poem has a problem with yor religion or politics or nationality.
Re: a comment on 9/11 by dougsoderstrom	13-Sep-02/1:10 PM
Dear drougsoderstrom: See my response to PAKI's comment, below. You're welcome, Beakism
Re: a comment on 9/11 by dougsoderstrom	13-Sep-02/1:09 PM
Indeed, as the learned PAKI has said, while a haiku need not be a rigid 5-7-5, if anything it should be shorter: the brevity is crucial to the feeling; the images in your poem are too wordy to fit the style of the haiku. My encyclopedia suggests that a haiku should be short enough to say comfortable in one breath, which is not the case with your work. 8====D Beakism
Re: Life's Great Irony by Tascobar	12-Sep-02/12:52 PM
'he was called a spack / behind his back'. smooth.
Re: a comment on AIDS Bonanza! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	12-Sep-02/9:57 AM
Unless I am mistaken, it doesn't actually mean anything, being as how 'denken' and 'wissen' are infinitives.
Re: 9/11 by dougsoderstrom	11-Sep-02/11:47 AM
nice non-haiku.
Re: a comment on Forbidden Love by beakism	11-Sep-02/10:34 AM
The pleasure is all mine.
Re: a comment on The Writing Life by poetandknowit	11-Sep-02/10:00 AM
I'm not quite sure if you're being ironic. Whether or not you are, I think my comment was perfectly suited. You have to say 'unlucky' with proper emphasis on the 'l' and a smug chuckle during the 'ucky', rasing your eyebrows throughout; that way, you get the strongest feeling of 'I'm pissed off and you're pissing me off even more so now I'm going to break your face'.