replying on The Writing Life by poetandknowit
11 Sep 2002, 9:42 AM
Now who's commenting at the same time as other people? Go on. Tell me.
on The Writing Life by poetandknowit
11 Sep 2002, 9:30 AM
Unllllucky.
replying on Putney at Low Tide by Christof
11 Sep 2002, 9:03 AM
Sorry!!!!!!! Won't happen again !!!!!$$$muchogas$$$
replying on Putney at Low Tide by Christof
11 Sep 2002, 9:02 AM
No he won't. Because even when he does get the leotard, some twat will turn up wearing an all-in-one of speed + 3, racing as a novice even though he's won three races this season, and kick his ass.
on Putney at Low Tide by Christof
11 Sep 2002, 8:59 AM
The language seems a little too pretty for Putney; but that doesn't take away too much.
on Leaf on the wind by troll454
10 Sep 2002, 2:03 PM
Besides the obvious, rather unremarkable final two lines, I don't see that this poem has anything to recommend it. Presumably the high votes are due to its emotional subject, but banal writing cannot stand up on its subject matter.
on Wise Clogg! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
8 Sep 2002, 3:24 PM
I don't believe there are so many negative votes on this. It couldn't possibly offend the sensitive sensibilities of a teenage girl.
replying on Mean Matt was so mean, when a homeless guy asked him for change he gave him a -blank- by beakism
8 Sep 2002, 4:45 AM
At your nearest Bums R Us.
on Don't Wanna Know by nightii
8 Sep 2002, 4:41 AM
Look, I have to side with Dark_Angel on this one. There's a fine line between kidding around and being downright insulting, and you haven't quite got the balance right. Better luck Next Time!
on The heart of self destruction by Roisin
8 Sep 2002, 3:56 AM
line five, I think what you actually mean is 'as we lie'.
lie (lying; lay; lain) : to be or to stay at rest in a horizontal position; rest, recline...
lay (laid) : to put or set down.
speak is in the present tense, so apparently you and your friend are laying eggs while you speak tenderly.
lie (lying; lay; lain) : to be or to stay at rest in a horizontal position; rest, recline...
lay (laid) : to put or set down.
speak is in the present tense, so apparently you and your friend are laying eggs while you speak tenderly.
on Forbidden Love by beakism
7 Sep 2002, 3:39 PM
come on, deidre, write a poem. I want to write long, abusive comments. I want to vote zero. I want to write poems about how ugly and talentless you are. so hurry up.
on Water Droplet by craiggiarc1971
7 Sep 2002, 3:37 PM
Aha! I understand the poem! All the pairs of words are related - EXCEPT SKIN AND CUSTARD!!!!11 - we are being forced to reconsider whether we are not, after all, cannibals.
on Water Droplet by craiggiarc1971
7 Sep 2002, 3:11 PM
Wow! Maybe now you can move onto 'Hop On Pop'!
on Mean Matt was so mean, when a homeless guy asked him for change he gave him a -blank- by beakism
7 Sep 2002, 3:01 PM
I think that that should be up to the reader - it could be the nail I drove through your hand, or the rocket I'm going to fire at your house, or the penis growing from your forehead where you used to have hair. I think the interpretation the reader chooses will reveal something about their subconscious.
on At the Olde Absinthe by Limness
7 Sep 2002, 2:49 PM
there's a gay pub down the road, you know.
on Hypocrites by PawnedTidal
5 Sep 2002, 3:06 PM
Indeed. If the poem flowed better, and if it wasn't a rant against parents, I'd enjoy it.