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Once (Free verse) by phoenixxx
A smile, a word And the dreams you stirred Once made me feel so alive A key, a ring Once a beautiful thing At times kept my head in the sky A note, a glance And that amorous trace Used to make life worth while A book, a game OH!-its all the same In a world that’s been defiled Hopes and fears Through all these years Have kept me going along Now I sing and shout And let the pain drive out In the words of an unsung song

Up the ladder: Sod
Down the ladder: Kiss Me

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.952381
Weighted score: 3.9712236
Overall Rank: 13390
Posted: June 12, 2003 1:37 PM PDT; Last modified: June 12, 2003 1:37 PM PDT
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[0] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 | 14-Jun-03/9:28 AM | Reply
The first two lines are plagiarised from 1984 fag.
[n/a] phoenixxx @ 24.158.33.107 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 14-Jun-03/11:03 AM | Reply
They aren't plagarized, they're borrowed. If you're going to try and be insulting in a forum such as this please use correct spelling and grammar. Also, try and see if you can refrain from the foul language.
[n/a] beakism @ 81.86.208.92 > phoenixxx | 14-Jun-03/12:10 PM | Reply
dfakjgruehgoahrhioaeeohirgegaerniopnipeanhierilrenklarwgn;n;bknoairneogeraonirea

who's a fucking moron?
[0] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > phoenixxx | 14-Jun-03/12:43 PM | Reply
I am impressed by your stilted way of talking and your astounding maturity!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!1111

I am trying to see if I can refrain from "the" foul language. FUCK FUCK OH NO IT LOOKS LIKE I CAN'T, WELL I'LL TRY HARDER NEXT TIME.
[0] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > phoenixxx | 14-Jun-03/12:46 PM | Reply
Also, you will find that "plagiarised" is the correct way to spell it in England, whereas "plagarized" isn't the correct way to spell it anywhere.
[0] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > phoenixxx | 14-Jun-03/12:46 PM | Reply
Also, you will find that "borrowing" without "citing reference" is what "plagiarising" "is".
[n/a] phoenixxx @ 24.158.33.107 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 15-Jun-03/10:07 AM | Reply
I apologize. I was inspired by those 2 lines to write this poem when I first read the book. I used the lines and then didn't look at the poem for over a year, therefore did not remember from whence they were taken.
[0] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > phoenixxx | 15-Jun-03/10:39 AM | Reply
The lines that "inspired" you from the book are given as an example of a "driveling song". What, Sir, do you think of that?
[5] richa @ 195.92.168.171 | 14-Jun-03/10:29 AM | Reply
I guess you've rubbed someone up the wrong way the sheer number of zeros you get is quite impressive

I do think these poems need a lot more personal thought and insight though they seem a bit assinine
and the statements seem unqualified

I got loads of bad marks when i first came on here. I guess you have to read the work of your audience and learn some lessons from it

Then if you get good you can do your own thing again a nd be pretentious like a proper artist!
[0] StuntHornist @ 69.14.157.52 | 21-Jul-03/8:50 PM | Reply
Dark Angel, it's amazing. You commented everything I was thining when I read this, except for one thing: It's not only a "driveling song" in the book, it was a song composed by a MACHINE for the benefit of the unwashed masses. Isn't that so much worse?
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