Re: “I’ll Drop You Off At The Next Corner” by Blindpoetry	9-Mar-04/4:38 AM
The car metaphor or whatever it is is too clumsy and esoteric, and often absurd. You might as well talk about leaving a cake out in the rain and losing the recipe and it taking so long to bake. (MacArthur Park) Read it out loud 'if you want to stop for food don't ride with me'. You can not write in an angry manner and then talk about stopping off for food.
Re: a comment on “I’ll Drop You Off At The Next Corner” by Blindpoetry	7-Mar-04/11:49 AM
For gross moral turditude!
Re: Early Morning by fevriere	2-Mar-04/9:51 AM
If you are going to use punctuation use it the way through. Needs a comma after insulated in the first verse and why the arbitrariness of capitals. First verse does not make much sense grammatically. Quite like the idea, the wisdom of an angel, how your wisdom is the age of your body but they are bodiless.
Re: The Lincoln Half by MacFrantic	2-Mar-04/5:33 AM
Lines 5,6,7 have no obvious context. Other than that I find this quite cute.
Re: Looking Outside by etherealmaiden	2-Mar-04/5:27 AM
You are on the inside looking out, you see children playing, chasing a lark, cutting themselves, getting over it. OK anything else?
Re: a comment on Lifes work by richa	2-Mar-04/5:21 AM
Thanks for the links, I have been unable to find anything about 'Indefinite space' other than the review sited , but I have bookmarked the NHI site and will take a further look.
Re: Passion is by fevriere	28-Feb-04/3:11 AM
The first few lines show a certain potential. 'Outside I am watching and life goes round/ like prose and just as' The rest is a bit off, but reading the entire submissions of a day. Something like this sticks out.
Re: Passion is by fevriere	27-Feb-04/10:14 AM
How adorable to read a poeme about passion from one of poemrankers Christian Youth. (the collapse thing is a bit naff and 'stroke me'?)
Re: Lifes work by richa	27-Feb-04/10:10 AM
(original) The dumb squirrel has again tilted the earth the clod-footed geranium's ear bends to bedrock, a boneless body again to be buried up to its neck in soil. Spadework, the skies stay open.
Re: Heather by andrewjthomas	26-Feb-04/10:02 AM
Many many stereotypes hold this back. Well written.
Re: Red by AskittlesK	26-Feb-04/9:55 AM
In hell you will be made to face yourself. How you have made light of self-mutilation.
Re: Homecoming by somemorepoetry	26-Feb-04/7:50 AM
your very best
Re: Choices in the Road by Pervy Elf	26-Feb-04/7:49 AM
To express this sentiment should only take two sentences max.
Re: Quest! by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?	24-Feb-04/2:27 PM
If you are not a child then you are an idiot -8-
Re: Everyone's choosing sides by zodiac	24-Feb-04/2:25 PM
A nice rush-like quality to this. And a good combination of image and narrative. Not sure about sharp smelling as memory. Do you really mean that memory is sharp smelling? Also wet leaves do not really burn.
Re: A Natural Witch by Lenore	24-Feb-04/2:21 PM
Personally I would prefer the witch to be a character. Then you can bring out these features in a more scholarly and less serially way.
Re: the wind's last crescendo by fair12	24-Feb-04/2:19 PM
Has a nice poetic feel, which is not always such a bad thing. Pleasant, and has a finished feel to it.
Re: Damn Georgia Power by BrandonW	24-Feb-04/2:13 PM
can nothing but a brownout stop this flowing?
Re: Glass Flowers by Bachus	24-Feb-04/2:11 PM
Not sure I understand convicted in the first line. Or the question mark. Reads well enough though.
Re: Whore Of Nazareth by Mona Lisa	24-Feb-04/2:08 PM
Seen a lot of this before, may have been you or a caducus poem. The first line is pretty ace though.